Heavens Arise...

A wondrous full moon day it had been,

Tranquillity shone out in full beam.

Each tide swung in full joy and reverie,

Losing itself in the arms of vast sea.

There she stood- weary and aloof,

With tickled thoughts battling through.

'If I could be one such tide';

she wished,

Longing for submission with pride.

If it soothes my tearful eyes,

If it takes away worldly ties,

Here I shed my feign smiles,

Diving in the depths where heavens arise!!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"There she stood- weary and aloof,
With tickled thoughts battling through.
'If I could be one such tide';
she wished,"
You are a amazing writer. The above lines are outstanding. Good poetry take people to places of sadness, happiness or new knowledge. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ezekiel Silver]

A remarkable poem with skilled word choice and stirring emotions. Excellant work.

[poetdoug]

You did a lovely and admirable job of tying in the great title to the wonderful climax. Good job my friend.

[writ rajat]

heavens arise is wondrous title I ever read.I think that short poems describes lot of poems,the way you describes the nature is awesome.good job keep writing

[Jem Sagcal]

This was quite beautiful, soothing and absolutely calming.

I would honestly like to comment on the very first line of the poem, which I may have found discomfort in reading. I would suggest omitting the "day", as it doesn't feel right, but that's just of my opinion.

All in all, it really is very beautiful!

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

The probability of what nature could calve out in our life. The imagery is well captured. Your words are simple and straigth forward to the point. I appreciate.