A Stolen Moment

Is it the gush of gale
Blowing away the sands of love?
Is it the rage of whale
Devouring the heavenly hub?

Their numb hearts no more tickle,
Their pale veins gather no life,
Cloud of sorrow hover in the middle,
Shunned are the hours of mushy flight.

Is it a tear for the withered shade?
Is it the need of a stolen moment?
Moment:
where sculpture of love is re- made.
Where message for life is re- sent.

Reviews

[MAC]

very poetic. love this!

okay i suck at reviews but i am honest, this is so wonderfully crafted

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks a tonne :)

[Acer]

Nicely written, but i loved this last stanza indeed, i saw there's a great deepness...

Is it a tear for the withered shade?
Is it the need of a stolen moment?
Moment:
where sculpture of love is re- made.
Where message for life is re- sent.......

nice word's, dominant words, well written i'd say. Word's has their own impact on your poem indeed.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank yous !

[Acer]

My pleasure :-''')

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful use of words and thoughts in the poem. I had to read again for the pleasure of the strong statements. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you

[Holly Mason]

very nice to read thank you for sharing

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you. :)

[Ambereen]

where sculpture of love is re- made.
Where message for life is re- sent.

I love it what more can say ? ... well penned

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks a tonne

[WingsToFly]

very well written

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks

[Frieda P]

Sounds much like a war torn love and plea for sanity and acceptance, it's so beautifully etched on the soul, lovely. I can't say more, it got me.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks for a suppa review . Huge hugs

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure, it's truly a lovely piece. :-) xo

[Steven Ingels]

Well written

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank yous

[CharlyeMonroe]

There is a somber quality to this piece. It gets light again at "shunned are the hours of mushy flight." I cant tell if you want to regain that tone in the last stanza. Keep writing :)

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks