Depravity

She glanced at him with no blink,
Charm brushing her lips,
'Hide not an un hidden bling,
Hath love known the seas?'

Throne this mighty moment?
Even if he strives,
'O'Time, when were you last benevolent?
Let my consort shine.'

'Fate!! Shun away thine valour,
Tease not distant souls,
Hey! Ruthless walls,
Hails out the irksome failure,
Rage deepens as each tear falls.'

Life though betrays, so do death??
Wrenched in defeat amidst us, they hide,
Snuggled in graves under each breath,
Agonised beats thus re abide.

Reviews

[Eric Cox]

Has a strength to the lines. Theme is penned with cool creativity. Nicely done. An excellent write.

[Ahmad Cox]

I love the hidden truths and message and the strong sense of rhythm in this poem.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks :)

[kelvin]

Being deprived of things that goes along with life's feelings like love for starters can effect us with self worth esteem and so forth this can be a aggravating agony that one endures. depravity is a cruel thing in itself but this is simply my take on this just an opinion as always keep writing fellow writer.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you so much Kelvin for your constant reviews. M glad !

[kelvin]

Your very welcome

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not sure how to interpret this one

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An unknown quantity to me. I think I need to understand the aetiology ore!

[Stonz P.]

The agony of being depraved of one's true love..
Took me a little time to get that. I do hope I am right.
Haha.
Good work as usual, though the flow is a bit uneven for me, but that depends on personal taste. Not a big issue.
Keep up the good work.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you very much.