Purity

When shadow of GREED hides, PURITY resides... 

Pure is the smile of a child, 

Pure is the cry of the deprived, 

Alas! TIME and its omnipotence, 

Has washed away the divine sands, 

Has empowered the fate of tomorrow, 

The glory of a wrinkled brow. 

Borne out of clay and shall be dug into it, 

Only stories to linger under the moonlit!!

Reviews

[Leandro Mendez]

very nice piece :)

[Writer #00]

Great poem. I like that you didn't only acknowledge the purity in the happiness of the innocent, but also in the sorrow of the neglected. Purity is simply a singularity of something, it doesn't have to be a positive emotion, as your poem shows. It also seems as if you were saying that the orthodoxy of religion will be replaced by the heterodox thoughts and philosophies of tomorrow with the lines:

"Alas! TIME and its omnipotence,
Has washed away the divine sand,
Has empowered the fate of tomorrow,
The glory of a wrinkled eyebrow."

[Writer #00]

The glory of a wrinkled eyebrow

[Writer #00]

The above, I thought, was a reference to the expression one makes when intently thinking?

read moreThe above, I thought, was a reference to the expression one makes when intently thinking?

Is this the message you were trying to send, or did you have something else in mind (I thought you might have since you chose the picture of a dove to represent the poem).

Well written.

*still thinking*/100

[Writer #00]

Sorry for the choppy review, WC cut off the end of it, so I had to post it in awkward pieces. : )

[Kajal Gulabani]

'The glory of a wrinkled brow' states.. The glory of a decrepit. Time is the ultimate ruler. It rules over the rich and the poor, the young and the old, the divinity as well as depravity. Hope I made my point come across. :)

[Writer #00]

Oh, you meant wrinkled by age, I was thinking...well, you know what I thought. I see the poem through your eyes now, still just as good--no--better. Thanks for the clarification.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Grt! M glad.. U r welcome :)

[MelissaBlack]

Beautiful

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks :)

[WingsToFly]

Nice write.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you :)

[CharlyeMonroe]

i really enjoyed this, the punctuation was punchy in all the right places along with the capitalization, it really sets up the themes of this work and allows the unwritten to leave its mark.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks a lot...

[Ahmad Cox]

So true and amazing. God truly is omnipotent and pure and we are reflections of God's light

[Kajal Gulabani]

Yepps indeed...

[kelvin]

Nice read here greed hides when purity resides nicely descriptive in stating some known to be as some of the purest things smile of a child for one. dug into and mad from clay indeed good writing as always keep writing fellow writer

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks Kelvin :)

[kelvin]

You're very welcome

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved the way you used words and thoughts in this poem.
"Pure is the smile of a child,
Pure is the cry of the deprived, "
A wise person reaches out to the needy and give what they can. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you so much :)

[KeeD]

Wow, "Pure is the smile of a child, pure is the cry of the deprived" just wow, sounds like something I would want on my bedroom wall. Really good write Kajal, you're an incredible talent, you make us Indians proud.

[Kajal Gulabani]

M charmed Keegan.. Thanks a tonne for such a motivating review :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Woah you have a wayt with profound verse. the voice has a pleading nature to it.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you so much for liking my work. #blessed