The Big Relax

The Big Relax

A Poem by Kaela Craven
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I am afraid people won't understand the meaning of this. Please tell me what you think it means, so I can figure out if it's clear or if not, how I can revise it.

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I am searching
For the big relax.
For the time when I can see the world in peace
Because I am filled with my own.
When I can look with my own eyes -
Without the lens of a book
Without a piece of art
Without a piece of music -
When I can look with my own eyes
And the world itself is art.

© 2008 Kaela Craven


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You're right, we do have a pretty similar thought process. This is so true. Nice work!

Posted 16 Years Ago


I'm not going to be much help with telling you how you can revise it to make your message clearer seeing as I'm not able to describe the message I got from it very well.
All that aside, I really like this. It's well written and it flows really well.
Anyway, this is a wonderful piece.
~S

Posted 16 Years Ago



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Kaela Craven
Kaela Craven

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