burning bridges.

smog lingered above the ground,

waves crashed into the walls,

two white liars stood a sea apart.

a hand held a torch

at the end of the bridge

and the piers went up in flames.

the debris fell into the water,

and as I looked at you amidst the smoke

I saw nothing more than a ghost.

Reviews

[Alessander]

This reminds me of 1920s symbolism (which I love).

Seemingly disjointed imagery interwoven in some startling way.

Smog, waves, walls, flames, torche, smoke, ghost...

Creates a certain blue subconscious undertone

"Two white liars stand a sea apart"

My random association is the statue of liberty holding a torch at one end of a sea, and at the other, perhaps another liar.

I know this is probably not close to anything that it's about, but that's what jumped into my head for some reason.

The end feels like disillusionment, or the vague remembrance of a dream.

Dug it.

[Kimberly Anastasia]

That's the best part about writing, a lot of times it can be interpreted however you want! Personally, this was about cutting ties with someone and "burning the bridge" between us. The gloomy undertone suggests how the relationship was and could bring up questions as to why it ended.
I really appreciate your review! I love seeing how my writing looks through another person's eyes and I'm glad that you liked it. :)

[Chris Shaw]

Strong metaphor for a broken relationship here. Well done.

Chris

[arcandon]

Again, if it's ok to say, this is very simple and real and I quite enjoyed it

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Burning bridges can be a two edged sword - one representing relief - but the other could harbour regret - great write … loved the metaphorical wordplay - kudos my friend … :-)

[Kimberly Anastasia]

thank you! no regrets here, toxic people deserve to be cut off :))

[Relic]

This could be a perfect night-time dream based on a bad relationship. The sub-conscience always jumbles things up but the depictions here are poetically appropriate and the metaphor stunning!

Great poem.

[Kimberly Anastasia]

thank you!

[AllauraRose]

This is an amazing metaphor for cutting off caustic relationships. I love how it says two white liars, so you are taking some responsibility as well for the demise of the friend ship. Amazing work!

[Kimberly Anastasia]

thanks so much! :)

[Levi Levin]

Sometimes walking away and burning the bridge is the wisest decision we can make. And it provides an educational example for others who would one day be in your shoes. Or perhaps a lesson you will pass to a child or loved one someday. Great job!!!

[Kimberly Anastasia]

I agree :) thank you!

[Levi Levin]

Your welcome!