Psychic

An impulsive write

Hot tears running down my cheeks, I sniffled. I tried catching my breath in attempt to calm myself down. It worked.

I breathed in and out, in and out, in and out.

I turned to the computer, my usual refuge at times like these. I wipe my tears, wanting the cool air to relax me. As my fingers danced on the keyboard, I broke down crying again.

I was breaking

I was breaking

My strength can't save me now

My heart felt tight. I breathed in and out to see if I could make a difference

My attempt was in vain

Amidst my sobs and cries I heard my phone ringing

Ringing and ringing

I turned to answer it

"Hello?" I said

"Stop crying."

Author's Note

Please comment as critically as you wish

Reviews

[xx]

Haha! Love the ending- great twist and the images painted in my head........

[Pax]

what a twist. great!

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Thanks you kuyaaa :D

[Pax]

... your welcome.

[Tsukin Archangel]

Whoa creepy ending loved this good job :3

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

lol IKR? Creepy how people could do that XD thanks

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol i see in ur mind~

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

-gasp- no you don't I see yours >:3

[Tsukin Archangel]

PSSH NO I SEE URS >;3

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

oh yeah? Pssshhhh I shall underestimate your powers >:D

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol did u mean undermine? or did u really mean u underestimate me lol

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

I underestimate P:

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol ok

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

hmmm now i don't know how to respond to ok o_e

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol idk :o u kinda did by saying this lol

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

lol yeah i did XD pssh must be a record

[Tsukin Archangel]

oh no i dont think so >;3 i think the comment on mine has more lol

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

It will reach that point, it will, soon XD just wait

[Tsukin Archangel]

oh no it wont Mine is gonna win >;3 U CANT CATCH UP!

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

psshhh I think I can XD just believe jk I'm gonna bet on mine ;P

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Wonderful read and write. I, too, love God. Not mad, just awake. Namaste

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Thank you and glad you shared the love :3

[Miiki]

AWWWWWW!!!! I LOVE IT! IT'S SO CUTE!!! haha I'm such a sucker for these kind of things :P

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Oh really? Everyone's a sucker for all kinds of things so I'm glad you like my story :D

[Miiki]

Haha you're welcome! And yeah, I'm a sucker for romantic stuff

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Hahaha... guilty of that too X3 Can't resist them though when with friends I would normally be acting all cool while I'm screaming inside

[Miiki]

Haha ikr! And if I do freak out they're all like -.- "you're so weird" hahaha i never get why they don't freak out either!

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

lol maybe they're just screaming inside too XD I hope so when I freak out I normally hug the person nearest to my be it a girl or a boy so I guess they have the right to think I'm weird o.o

[Miiki]

lol, that would be embarrassing if it was the guy you liked. and when i freak out i start yelling and rambling on and on all about it. So I can see how that could be annoying c:

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

lol maybe not? Maybe I pre-planned hugging him ;) LOL I don't have the courage for that D:< I ramble too you know to the point where everyone thinks I'm speaking in an alien language

[Miiki]

haha i know how you feel about the guy thing. lol, about hugging, do you know what zapped is? Well i was zapped to my best friend's crush, but since he had a girlfriend I had to hug him. she got so jealous afterwards xD

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Unfortunately no D: but I see what you mean XD

[Miiki]

haha zap is when you write a name and time on someone's hand, and if they look at it, they'll have to ask the person out at that time. or they can choose to hug and kiss them. so yeah that's why i had to hug him

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

My guess turned out to be wrong XD don't worry the mastermind is to blame

[Miiki]

hahaha all masterminds will have flaws :)

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

they will because they have us to worry about hahaha >:D

[Miiki]

hahaha :D

[Chris]

Chuckling here... Well done. You drew the line in and I was happy to turn a page.

Take care,
Chris

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Thank you :3 Glad that you like it :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Good story... I know where you got this *evil grin* It's somehow familiar

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Ohohoho? You do? glad you know cause I forgot bout it already P:

[Rhianne Ney]

haha lol

[.]

My heart felt tight. I breathed in and out to see if I could make a difference

My attempt was in vain

Amidst my sobs and cries I heard my phone ringing

Ringing and ringing

I turned to answer it

"Hello?" I said

"Stop crying."
That was a little hilarious
Great work! 100/100

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Thank you :D

[.]

No problem =)

[Irvette Dauphine]

like it..
at the end there's some one that will cheer you up :)

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Thanks :D

[Irvette Dauphine]

this story is make me remember how my teacher (okay, he is like a friend to me) cheer me up when i am down

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Really? Same when I was in elementary ;) Don't you love teachers like that?

[Irvette Dauphine]

yea, of course i love
but, i still waiting for my prince or my guardian angel XD

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Everyone is -sigh- just here waiting lol

[Irvette Dauphine]

haha..

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

patience is the key...