Your World

A poem I had published back in High school

 

Your world

Deeper, hear the sound, the melodies of wakefulness

Adapt to the enormous pulchritudinous consistent void

That ruptures the venomous silence of my mind

My thoughts, how they tear at you,

Churning beneath my lyrics.

The man, he with the snake-like stature,

Furthering my emotions that reside continuously within

The comfort of my oblivious sublime zone.

The sounds, how they breed an excessive plethora of nonsense,

Yet  you clear the path of society’s shattered misconceptions.

My inebriating urge to hold you, withdraws

Within the bleakness that somehow sooths you, cautiously.

Our words, thoughts integrate, then intertwine between the crevices,

Creating a truth that is disheartening to us both.

I dream too much, of what I’d long to acquire-

The magnum fortune bequeathed within its mirth.

And holy says the heart deep inside my apothecary.

I am cursed as your face replaces all others,

The predominance of your life speaks clearly of life.

I see you through all the vacant trepidations,

And feel a more abundance of love,

That none could fathom,

Though I remain nameless within your world.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The language you choose to put in there:

Adapt to the enormous pulchritudinous consistent void...
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The sounds, how they breed an excessive plethora of nonsense,

and there are others...that stick out...but the feelings brought forth shows in this work...a bit different in style from then and now...and how the ending with all the endearing lines:

Though I remain nameless within your world.

[Moflo]

The ending of this piece makes it so strong in the end, it really qualifies all the previous emotions very well. I love the wording, your descriptions are great. Good work! (Yes I took a break from essay writing!)