MOONLIGHT FLOWER

Screams echoed throughout the streets of Prontera. Dashing forward, Moonlight Flower and her band of attackers streaked by, seemingly a blur of white and silver. A villager ran for her life, not at all aware that the strong breeze she was feeling was a wolf pouncing on its prey�"her. She screamed her last breath and seemed to disappear before her horrified husband’s eyes.  

                The screams carried throughout the string of villages that lay around Prontera City. A farmer, working in the fields that sat amongst the hills, looked down as the closest village was suddenly engulfed in a flash of white. His eyes widened as the charming town, alive and bustling a few seconds ago, was transformed into a blazing inferno filled with screams and snarls. He rushed to his small house, where his wife waited to greet him with a worried expression.

                “La Pueblo es ardiente!” The Village is burning!

                He would have continued, but a blur of white appeared. Turning around in shock, the farmer caught a glimpse of the creature responsible for the destruction. It was at least twice as large as a normal wolf, although it shared the same characteristics as one. Two thick lines of fur streaked down the sides, ending as a silver tail. Snarling, the creature opened its mouth, in which two elongated rows of teeth gleamed. The couple screamed…

 

Reviews

[Radical Dreamer]

First of all, great title! People often say a title doesnt matter but it is as important as the actual writing. Horror creatures are right up my alley and this story caught me. I like that you started instantly with action, "Screams echoed throughout the streets of Prontera," this is a great way to catch an audience. I also like the idea that you made the creature somewhat realistic where as it is only twice as large as a wolf rather than this exaggerated monster. Great intro to a story, cant wait to read the rest.