If You Only Knew

something from the top of my head

.... if you only knew how i feel about you how you are my thoughts thru out the day and the night oh how i wish i can fix my wrongs and make them right  its funny when i  first met you it was actually  love at first sight cant change how i feel and dont want to thinking of you  tickles me and make me feel brand new its hard to express my love for you but i try to in everything i do i care so much that it drives me insane dreaming and waking up whispering your name the love i have for you can only be so true but i keep this bottled inside of me and often say ...... if you only knew

Author's Note

i write from the heart in most of every poem i create feedbacks are wanted

Reviews

[Banished]

i actually kind of like how you didn't break this down into stanzas or use punctuation.
I honestly thought this poem was really good.
i can fully understand how you were feeling when you wrote this and i can tell you wrote this from the heart.
it flowed perfectly and had great rhythm.
keep up the great work
:)

[Michael N.]

I like how emotional you are in this, even without your 'author's note' I could tell this was from the heart. Also, I agree with Banished that I like how you didn't break this down into stanzas, it makes the reader go back and reread it and helps them to fully understand the heart and soul you put into this. There were a few grammatical errors that could be worked on, but to me this is a rough diamond. It's unpolished, but beautiful nonetheless.