Addiction

You're a poison baby, and you've got me afflicted.
My brain says no, but my body is addicted.
Withdrawal is a b***h, so give me one more fix,
and we'll both pretend we're good.
You fooled me twice so shame on me,
I took more than I could take.

You taste like summer, you taste like rain.
You taste like something awful when
I crawl back up the drain.
You're bittersweet when I admit defeat,
so stay for just one more night.

You're just a trick, you're a dirty little secret.
Where do I begin to trust you when
you say that you can't keep it?
Under the covers you're the perfect lover,
but above it's just a game.
The joke's on me when I want to be
anything more than shame.

You're a poison baby, and you've got me afflicted.
My brain says no, but my body is addicted.
Withdrawal is a b***h, so give me one more fix,
and we'll both pretend we're fine.
You fooled me twice so shame on me,
it's time I draw the line.

You taste like lies, you burn so good.
You've enabled your bad habit for
longer than I could.
At the end of it all there's no one to call,
so don't come look for me.

Reviews

[The Girl with the smile]

I like this poem a lot! Every line is well thought out and flowed nicely. Excellent use of descriptive words, you painted a picture that is relatable! Very Nice!

[Christine]

Very nice. I think if you focused on the rhyme and meter, this poem would really jump off the page. I thought it was interesting that you rhymed the first two lines, but I found myself a little disappointed that it didn't continue through the whole poem. The personification is great, I loved how you brought the addiction to life, as many people find that to be a hard truth when stuggling through something like this. I do think you could build on the progression of the addiction. But these are merely suggestions. Thank you for the poem.