She

 

 

 

 

 

Come a little closer

 

Glance into who she is

 

She’s the one who was never his

 

She’s the one I’ve seen hide behind her grin

 

When you see her, you’ll notice her porcelain skin

 

Some say she’s rambunctious, I say she’s purely unique

 

She won’t be here for long, so better take your sneak peek

 

One day she will love with all of her heart

 

Poetry has always been her God-given art

 

Listen for a minute, hear my words as I say

 

"Beware her attitude and hips that sway"

 

She’s left some in the dust

 

And there were some abandoned in lust

 

There are others who can’t afford to receive

 

A part of her mind they cannot conceive

 

One more glance, as she is walking swift

 

Oh, the brazen way her moods will shift

 

She’s a girl who can be insecure

 

But she’s steadfast and can endure

 

She’s your lover, she’s your friend

 

With competition, she won’t contend

 

She's all that she is

 

She's all you will be

 

When I talk about you

 

I talk about me

 

 

Reviews

[Antony]

Very spunky, this one blew me away, I love how you talk of her, coming to grips with the inner her and laying it all on the line for that one person she seems to be seeking, my favorite lines, which say so much to me. There are deep thoughts in this, makes me think. Nice format as well.
Antony

With competition, she won't contend
She's all that she is
She's all you will be
When I talk about you
I talk about me

[James K. Blaylock]

Wow, another wonderful piece. I truly dig your style!

jkb

[Mr. Lopez]

I like the confidence that you reflect upon in knowing one self. The catch me if you can game that you play with words. To know you is to love attitude and your boldess in saying so. You expose your strengths and your weakness brazenly without shame. Your words flow freely and your fans wait only for more. Great job Jenn.

[larryb]

Nicely written , flows great ......

[Drea]

Looking in the mirror....and liking what you see
Great work Jenn and a good write a s well. I like the flow; it moves at a nice pace, matching up with the words you chose to describe yourself.

Blessings and Namaste
Rhiannon

[Jason]

Wow! great job Jen! I really loved this one...your best yet (from what i've read) "Beware her attitude and hips that sway" - my fav line. This seems to be an exploratory view of yourself. I also get the feel that you are feeling good about yourself these days judging by the tone. I also feel some mystery too. I love it.

[a Messenger]

Beautifully delivered Jenn. You're feeling that freedom
and letting the whole world know it. I love the self
insight in this piece. Self realization, knowing who you
are and what you want is priceless. This poem makes it
clear you've found it, and are setting out after it.
Go get it Girl.

[Prose-full]

"She's the one I've seen hide behind her grin"---this is great..i'm caught..

"Some say she's rambunctious, I say she's purely unique

"There are others who can't afford to receive
A part of her mind they cannot conceive"-----this is genuis..i love it..it so clear

"She's a girl who can be insecure
But she's steadfast and can endure"-----you have a way with rhyming flow...shweeet

"She's all that she is
She's all you will be
When I talk about you
I talk about me"------what a wrap...you were right i do like it..
this is amazing...my fav from you..my library is its destination..

[J.P.O.et]

A nice 'Glance into who she is'
Def states the case of a woman who has a lot to give
and is done giving it to the wrong people
We are all insecure in some ways but I like the determination in
this one. Nice write

J.P.O.et

[An owl on the moon]

This one seems so lyrical to me; I could almost hear music! The playfulness is magical, and the end carries such a powerful personal twist. Very well done!

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

I like the rhyme and beat to this. Like the way you are looking at yourself yet having an up here kind of perspective.... Does us good to examine and evaluate.... but best to be happy or comfortable with what you see..... The discovery is great to.... to value self.... excellent. Thanks for pointing me to this.... great read here.

"Beware her attitude and hips that sway"..... (because baby, she will blow you away!!!!)

Kath