She

 

 

 

 

 

Come a little closer

 

Glance into who she is

 

She’s the one who was never his

 

She’s the one I’ve seen hide behind her grin

 

When you see her, you’ll notice her porcelain skin

 

Some say she’s rambunctious, I say she’s purely unique

 

She won’t be here for long, so better take your sneak peek

 

One day she will love with all of her heart

 

Poetry has always been her God-given art

 

Listen for a minute, hear my words as I say

 

"Beware her attitude and hips that sway"

 

She’s left some in the dust

 

And there were some abandoned in lust

 

There are others who can’t afford to receive

 

A part of her mind they cannot conceive

 

One more glance, as she is walking swift

 

Oh, the brazen way her moods will shift

 

She’s a girl who can be insecure

 

But she’s steadfast and can endure

 

She’s your lover, she’s your friend

 

With competition, she won’t contend

 

She's all that she is

 

She's all you will be

 

When I talk about you

 

I talk about me

 

 

Reviews

[Antony]

Very spunky, this one blew me away, I love how you talk of her, coming to grips with the inner her and laying it all on the line for that one person she seems to be seeking, my favorite lines, which say so much to me. There are deep thoughts in this, makes me think. Nice format as well.
Antony

With competition, she won't contend
She's all that she is
She's all you will be
When I talk about you
I talk about me

[Riding the Rainbow]

really good poem..
well done!

[murrill]

This is a great poem it reminds me how people are insecured and not happy with there selve when they look in a mirror and al they need is a little satisfaction. Atleast thats what I am getting out of it. Could be about something totaly different. It is like a painting you may see something different than some one else. It is how the poem speaks to you. I love it!

[Love Struck]

I'm definetely adding this to my favorites...I adore the phrases you used, like 'porcelain skin' and 'God-given art.' I'm curious - where did you find the inspiration behind this story?

[Carl]

I liked this because of its personal nature. Us poets are a rare and fragile breed. using our talents and abilities to inspire so many but sometimes the weight of words can weigh so heavy on our shoulders. The writer of the this poem is a some what tormented soul. as in the line "Shesthe one who was never his. Love Lost maybe. Fragility comes through in the phrase "porcelin skin" handle with care baecause i will crack. But like a lot of china the writer ofd thois poem is purley unique. No one can write like her because they are not her. Loves longing is the theme of the phrase "one day she will love" she finds her solace in poetry maybe she creates chracters from a bygone age to feel what it would be like to have been loved in a different time. so we have learned the writer of this poem is fragile unique longing for love and now we learn she is fiesty she has attitude and a hips that sway. does this exude confidence or is she insecure that she hides behind the words she creates. She is confiendent she will be what you want her to be friend, lover, she finds all people to play when all we want is for to play herself and that may be the scariest role of all for her. so you may see her as one of these people a lover a friend a fiesty female but she is justjen 2me

[Jorge Ramos]

I really like how the poem flows. I think it was very well written; I loved the end. good job!

[Orlando Murcia]

When I talk about you
I talk about me

These lines made me
think about the phrase
when you point your fingr
3 are pointing right back at you

I enjoyed this

Thank you for sharing

Orlando M

[Emotional Orphan]

Self disclosure...what a wonderful two edged sword. I appreciate so much your honesty, and willingness to share what is important to you...and possibly someone else. The layout and flow of this one is very well done.
And the emotion...well that is self evident. Reminds me I know her, you and me well. Thanks.

[Shane Brooks]

a very personal poem good rhythm nice rhyme scheme I will have to read some more of your stuff

[Raja]

A magnificent way introducing oneself! I like every inch of your poem. I love the way you describe a woman in our life. I was mesmerized by the nice flow of words.

Really a good write!

Thank you

Raja

[Jabez]

"Some say she's rambunctious, I say she's purely unique
She won't be here for long, so better take your sneak peek
One day she will love with all of her heart
Poetry has always been her God-given art"

beautiful. beautiful. the lines hit me hard! nice.