Intention

 

 

 

For so long her existence was a desiccated palisade

 

Yearning freedom of languish existing beyond shade

 

Arctic chill of nonexistent breath blew on soft ivory skin

 

Journey of sheer memory through many places she'd been

 

Desolation overtook passion where ability was scattered

 

Leaving soul stifled in stale air and her psyche shattered

 

Scars from her bed of thorns are now plucked one by one

 

Shade from window pulled back to reveal the bright sun

 

New air blows and her heart begins to pound lively again

 

Naïve girl with dreams flies in sky as a weak baby wren

 

Wings fragile as she flutters vagrantly in fast fading fear

 

Courage whispers “Fly harder for journey‘s end is near”

 

Love awaits as soul cries for an understanding of intention

 

When hearts are true there’s no need for His intervention

 

Reviews

[Mr. Lopez]

This piece is moving and most powerful! A second chance at love and life are always good reasons to wake for yet another day.
Shade from window pulled back to reveal the bright sun
I love this line ! As if awakened from a dead sleep to see that there is life left in you yet.
When hearts are true there's no need for His intervention
this line too is very moving and encouraging. There is hope and convictionin your words and to you I give thanks for such a wonderful write. Great job !

[Kari]

good job

[THE BLACK SEAL]

well i think you did well on this one. i reall have no complaints about it, and it shows a nice hopeful side. The only thing i might change is the small font. You might try increasing the size a little, it would not show up to well on my computer

[Andrea A. Wentz]

Hope reborn.... Simply beautiful! This seems to have a differnent flow and style to what I have read before of yours, but I absolutely love it! Mature, but full of love and looking to the light at the end of the tunnel. :D I love pieces like that, ones that see the darkness yet look towards the light. Ones where you can see the rebirth, the parting of the curtains, removal of the thorns, those are truly inspiring works. Thank you for sharing this piece. :)

[Ralphy]

Beautiful poem. You delivered a masterpiece to the reader as they enter your past and await your future. They know your pain, and await your gain. Nicely written. Even the fonts make feel a part of the poem although, they are very small...Nice write.

[Krishna]

I didn't expect to see such long lines and crafted poetry, interesting that you write with structure, its harder to take in but more impressive when done so slowly.

[Antony]

Like the newness of Spring, a new bud, you begin to push through the hard earth, which has made you dormant, longing for new life and hope, you have struggled to reach this point, but now the sunshines for you, that is how I read this. very good flow and the rhyming was excellent.
Antony

[a Messenger]

Very well penned.
Nice rhyme and rhythm.
This is an interesting journey from loneliness and desolation to love and elation.
Scars from her bed of thorns are now plucked one by one



Shade from window pulled back to reveal the bright sun



New air blows and her heart begins to pound lively again

These three lines sum up the whole poem.
Very well done Jenn.

[Bennett Logan]

This is different for you! I like it... It really gave me something to look at, and your word choice is a lot more deliberate. Keep up the good work.