Change of Heart

It was pure and true.

It was once given to you.

At one time it only knew happiness.

But you turned it into agonizing sadness.

Now it's hardened and won't open to anyone.

It was tattered and divided when you were done.

It's probably a waste to tell you this is about my heart.

You took advantage of a once gentle soul from the start.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Shadows of Sight]

If you step back from the screan and squint your eyes, it kinda looks like a beehive! And you know that in there is honey. One of the many foods of the Gods! Plus it is sweet! Thus i would have to say that even though you feel as if your heart is empty, I would disagree. I think there is still a great Sweetness about you, I have seen that in your reviews, and The gods must surely value your talent! :)
Great Poem!
Just my weird View huh? he he :)

[Cal Vance]

So beautiful,the words are so pure and u take the time to use your heart,very good beautiful!

[-Adam-]

I really like this poem. I know exactly what it talks about. I have many poems along the lines of this one. I think you might really like them. Thanks for sharing your work.

-Adam-

[Kevin Galbreath]

Well done. Not sure if it was on purpose but the way each line is just a bit longer than the previous one makes this one even more interesting.

[Jabez]

this is so sad! i can feel my soul cry again.. good good good. =)

[Joseph - Michael]

That was real short, yet it means so many things, so it sure is a great writing you got there...

Also, I'm going have to take it to my list, that's how great it is...

[BlakeL79]

Ah, the age old tale of a broken heart that cannot feel again. Sometimes I try to write about things that I have yet to experience and sometimes experience show through in my writing. I believe that even when we write about things that we think will never happen again, like our ability to love, we are actually putting that part behind us through the release of our prose and beginning the healing process.
I have learned to never to say never, in all things. I hope if you did experience this that it helped to let go of hurt and sorrow. If you are reflecting on a well past event, hopefully it reminded you of things you have learned.

Excellently shaped verbiage, fun to look at as well as read.

[Yemaya Theresa]

Beautiful it makes the reader feel the burning pain of your heart. Great writing.

[a Messenger]

Very well thought out and carefully planned to get just the right number of letters in each line to get the shape so perfect.
Nicely expressed, but I have to agree with Nature's Feet that your heart is not dead. Not by a long shot.

[Kelsie :]]

wow this was amazing! many people prob. can relate to this poem...i know for a fact i can. its funny how love can start and then the guy gets to tear it all part.
i LOVED it :)

[THERISA]

Hopefully, we learn from mistakes and grow as a person. Worse, when the person who breaks our heart is family. The ache that never goes away. Interesting usage of shape to the poem that you wrote in. Did you have any particular reason for the hive shape to it? Thank you for sharing this poem with us.

Therisa