Intervention

Everyone has a rock bottom. Sometimes it comes to a screaming stop. You realize............

 

You shouldn't have opened that door.

You shouldn't have desired to know more.

 

No!

No!

Why?

 

I'm running.

I'm crying.

 

Why did you want to catch me?

One more hit would have set me free.

 

Yes!

Yes!

One more hit!

 

Maybe then I would admit

 

To the lies

To the deceptions

 

Why didn't you walk away from your suspicions?

 

Skin crawling

Chest is aching

 

I broke all of the plans we were making.

 

I'm flying away.

I'm not here to stay.

 

I found out about false teachers.

I heard sermons from evil preachers.

 

I'm coming home.

I need time alone.

 

My withdrawals are subsiding.

My personalities are dividing.

 

Silence

 

My only intervention

I follow my conviction.

Reviews

[The Grammar Nazi]

I like the flow of this poem, it actually speaks a lot in just a few simple words. Being addicted to anything isn't nice...Yeah, it might seem like a good thing while you're addicted, but when you look back and see all that's changed since then, it's amazing to see how much you've changed. I really like this write, because it's very strongly written. Great job.

[Ryan Luse]

You hit a wave of emotions that I have gone through. This really hit a chord with me. Thanks for sharing

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Nothing can take the pain away better. That's what I got from your poem, one is too much and a thousand hits aint enough. good work.

[Yvonne Heidt]

Great form and disjointed logic. How an addict thinks.

I could truly relate!

"My withdrawals are subsiding.
My personalities are dividing..."

Thanks for entering the "Addictions" contest!

[Kari]

huh?

[Ralphy]

Oh, this sounds like an illusion of wit cases by drug induced hysteria. I like the way words play on the reader's emotion to bring forth a revival of feels that the writer conveys to the subconscious mind. I enjoy the liquefying sense of being as one attempts to eradicate a wrong. Love it Jenn

[Jason]

As a recovering addict, this is a very powerful poem. Very well written, good job!

[John Stussy]

wow, strong piece. good work. thanks for recommending it to me. only one part that kind of threw me off for flow, but you don't need to change it lol.
Skin crawling
Chest is aching

[larryb]

Being Bipolor and somewhat goofy ive tried a long long list of drugs in my life so i can relate to your poem, i enjoyed this and it hits home with many im sure, keep it up :)

[Celtic Cat]

I loved the whole piece...but this part absolutely rocked me:
My withdrawals are subsiding.
My personalities are dividing.
Silence
My only intervention
I follow my conviction.

Completely awesome piece....you really rock these out!! Nice!