No Conquering

Collab with John Stussy

I walked in shadow of iniquity
Evil shadows forever follow me
My mind corrupted by insanity
My feet paralyzed, unable to flee

 

Forcing me down, I fought you back
My throat squeezed into a knot,
Naive screams, during the attack
My temper smoldered to black.
Now conscience is all I lack
How does a heart feel to rot?
Can you stop my human attack?
You're too late, your soul is bought

 

I dealt with all life's troubles tossed my way
Personal ordeals, I could never stray
In this battle, I've entered disarray
Enemies always thinking fight is play

 

Cold and numb heart, now wandering astray
I'm the predator, you're my only prey
Voices, they haunt me, nothing left to say
Try bending me down if you'll think I'll pray

 

Forcing me down, I fought you back
My throat squeezed into a knot,
Naive screams, during the attack
My temper smoldered to black.
Now conscience is all I lack
How does a heart feel to rot?
Can you stop my human attack?
You're too late, your soul is bought

Reviews

[m.s.early]

Transcends the moment at times, temporal at others. Musical time signature changes force a new relationship with the poem in places.

Representative of the emotional roller coaster caused by catalytic trauma. A twisting rhythm for a twisted subject.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

I like the grit, fortitude,perseverance and tenacity tempered by tolerance and forgiveness. The pen IS mightier than the sword. You and your collaborator wield the sword well.

[Forever Hidden]

Wow. Such a powerful write.
You rhyme so well in some places!!!! :"D
Ah.. Beautiful

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Some intense work... this could be a virtual situation or someone fighting their own fears and doubts. Well done.

[larryb]

Dark ...chilling...well done jenn

[B-poet]

Powerful poetic approach here. I enjoyed every line from start to finish. Great work. A unique and as a matter of fact type style of poetry. A work that deserves to be in a class of its own. :)

[Healing Star]

Wow... this is very moving - kind of sums up what I feel many times in many situations. It is the bully in the playground, the confrontations at work, the choking that is put on people because they are not the NORM.
These lines stand out to me as being exceptional.

How does a heart feel to rot?
This is what has happened to the villain and can happen to the victim over time.

Enemies always thinking fight is play
The games that go on that are not games at all - they are damaging ugly things.

Try bending me down if you'll think I'll pray
If they find that you appear weak to them they will not stop, they become relentless in their attacks.

Find peace in knowing you are not alone, there is a new day dawning, we are walking into a new sun. Each morning face the sun and welcome the energy of the new day into your heart, breathe in the universe and let her ancient knowledge whisper to you the secrets that she holds for you. Ah yes, it is a whole new day, gone are the shackles that once held us down, gone is the misery of the old ways, gone are the systems that no longer work. The new day is filled with compassion, with hope, with caring, with love, understanding, wisdom and peace, long and lasting peace. It is the energy of the new female with her love she will guide us on a new journey, a true journey of our hearts.

[justjenn_2u]

I STILL FEEL LIKE I AM BEING CHOKED WHILE READING THIS..............

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Try bending me down if you'll think I'll pray................wicked poetry this is. Well done Poet.

[Barbara Walker]

Try bending me down if you think I'll pray-That line really jumped out at me. Very strong, almost an epitaph. Great write!.