a bit past today..[i see us]

i look a bit past today

and i still see you there..

still beautiful

promises still kept

 

a dog and a cat,

maybe a fish

maybe another baby
to make us full circle

 

i'm not one to think far past today;

i'm more of a moment to moment thinker

i like to let the future unfold;

but somehow i see you there

 

we're together

we have a beautiful life

and beautiful love

us together;and we are in love together

 

we have a beautiful home

an office-desk for me

another laptop for you

 

a small table for two

you have your favorite fruits

you've bought plenty snacks for me to grab

[as i am always busy writing]

 

a space to paint;and a space for them all to hang

a hammock out back
in which we lay and observe

the babies run and play

 

me telling you 'i love you'
as you retire for the day;

you telling me you love me
just as you doze into dreamery

 

i hope to meet you there.;

we can dream another dream together

a sweet dream;a perfect dream;

 

us watching us and us smiling at us

we are dreaming of us

falling in love all over again

Reviews

[Butch Decatoria]

I adore this piece, so full of light and I feel as floating in your wonderful vision. The only thing I would change possibly is the line "to make us full circle" I would change the word "make" to "take"?? otherwise nothing else would change, you have made me fall in love all over again with the simple ways words tell a story, an emotion... thank you for sharing this.

PFluffer~

[justjenn_2u]

So you can see her in the future, beautiful as ever. Plans made and plans to be fulfilled. So sweet, the mention of another baby. (Hey, I have two boys, you can borrow one and send him back when he gets on your nerves, lol).

It seems that you are usually the last to look into the future, what it holds and that you seem to live for the present. But in this case, you make an exception (she must be special to your heart).

As I first read, I feel she is there. Once again, your power of words gets me. Now, I realize she is a woman of your dreams. I love the way you write. Just as a poet should, never giving the answer away at first. How powerful!