Nightly Loneliness

i wrote this over the summer

another night with only

a pillow for confort

 

My back aches from the truama

My heart burst from the abandonment

My eyes burn from the insomnia

My lungs scream from holding it all in

 

I'm lost

On an island alone

I look at toward the mainland

Where people fake happiness together

To try and be really happy

 

I glare at the other islands

where people are stranded alone

We're close enough to see but

Yet, too far away to hear each other

We're not faking and show our sadness

So we broke off from the mainland

To become gossip of the week

 

I look up at the planets where

The people there really smile

The people there really laugh

The people are forever together

Never a day away

 

So I sit alone at night

To write about these islands,

that mainland, and those planets

 

So I can finally sleep

Reviews

[Virellius an Fiach]

I love it. The imagery, the use of modern ideas with a timeless metaphorical world... beautiful.

[Lorraine Pearson]

This write is full of metaphor. Its constantly unfolding...I kept waiting to see what you would do next. It had great flow. (you need to check your typos however, they distract from the beauty!)

[Molly]

I liked the analogies you used. Just tidy up the spelling and it's great. :D