I was you once.

it's our luxury game, my treat-- your test.

Be my victim tonight.

 

When I press you into the floor,

pin your heart under my hands,

and look at you through my hair

you can pretend that I'm the one.

Tomorrow we can pretend it was all an accident

so let me waste you in this dark.

Let's make a home in your troubled thoughts.

Some indulgence please.

I want you to pull me inside out,
pardon me.

I’ll take the blame so

kiss me kiss me kiss mekiss mekissmekissme

This is the language I learned

and I’ll teach it to you.

I’ll be Eve tonight,

an arcadian archetype

(if you like to roleplay)

and I’ll burn your skin, drown you in fire.

You’ll be mine.

 

Why don’t you come here and try to prove me wrong?

 

You are rings and roses

sweet things, nice things.

And I, I don’t know anymore.

My thoughts all smoldered and curled up.

Well, I mean
do you like crime novels?

Reviews

[Richard]

my god again, amazingly nonchalant
I get a lot of song lyrics out of your poems

[h d e rushin]

"Why don't you come here and try to prove me wrong?"

Not a threat perse but an indication of something impending; in all my years,
never before seen in a love poem. You are so brave.

This is so tender yet you can feel the throe, hard and painful struggle
happening here. Sometimes poetry just takes over, curls up...smolders.
Great anticlimactical ending....good work, dana

[quinfinn]

wicked diverse and unique. a journey for the mind. quite the disturbing and image filled piece.

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~ hahahaha... oh, what a closing... you have a stunning mind... ~ this is infinitely poetic work... i dunno where to begin... so let me begin from the beginning... ~ the scene is etched perfectly... these two lines are particularly astounding...

"so let me waste you in this dark.
Let's make a home in your troubled thoughts."

~ "arcadian archetype" is incredible alliteration... and "rings and roses" is just beautiful... i loved the change in font size... it felt like the music began to fade a bit... but not completely...

"My thoughts all smoldered and curled up."

~ is so moving... and then the closing... it did make me laugh... because i just love black humour... and i love the sharpness of your mind... very few people can say something that is apparently random but deeply profound... oh, it's a joy to read you... glad you posted something new... thank you... :)

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~ and... of course... the title is brilliant... just too good...