Galaxies

Deeper meanings.

With every star that
falls upon your tongue, 
it is my hope that I
cross your mind 
before your mind
crosses
galaxies.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

My goodness.... : ) Write ANYTHING about the topic of space and I'm a fan!! Well, not many pull it off so nicely, but you do. Tapering the poem off like that, as well, was very cool to see. It's romantic, adorable, and there are many levels to this that I could only ASSUME when I was younger!! Beautiful poem, Lauren... Like I said on the jump poem, how do you think the poem would look if it had a space above and below the poem?! Even putting it in the middle would look very nice. : ) If you would ever like to see a poem relating to space on MY page, let me know. I wrote it for a beautiful girl named, Tori on my friend list about 4 months ago. It's too bad that when I left two months ago, that I erased that poem and a lot of others on here. It had about 90+ comments on it. It was the only poem that I didn't comment on, so my views and/or comments about it wouldn't change people's minds on what to write. Wonderful job... I'm a fan. lol xoxo -Mark

[Patrick O'Neil]

I think this is a nice opening to something bigger. Would like to see how it unfolds.

[Zap-the-awesome]

I hate wondering if someone I care for is thinking of me or not. :/ great work!