The Cool Breeze

This is just one day out of my life.

 

 

 

The Cool Breeze

 

As I sat looking out the window, there was a cool breeze blowing. Time was my own, since I don't have anyone to answer to. The kids are all gone now that they have grown up and moved away.

 

Somehow I feel content, and happy that I have lived this long. Sitting down I started to think ' what if I hadn't survived that one day? What if I were the only one home when the tragic event occurred?' Now it seems ages ago, yet it was only 18 years since I was first admitted to the hospital!

 

What would have happened had I perished that day? How would my children faired? Would they have turned out as well as they did? Or would they become psychos or worse- dead like me?

 

Such things like that are not something I care to dwell on. Especially on a wonderful day like today. It's the best time of the year- fall. Time when the air is cool, clear and breezy- good sweater weather. The time to be able to cuddle up with someone on the couch. But today I just sit here relaxed, enjoying the nice cool breeze of the morning!

Reviews

[Crowley]

Heavy sigh....the last paragraph makes me feel relaxed. Nice introspective thought process. Great first paragraph. I would add a "have" between children and faired in the third paragraph, helps with the flow a bit. The only other comment I have is the like that in the first sentence of the last paragraph, doesn't seem necessary and taking it out would also help the flow a bit. Great feel, very philosophical and brings up a broad range of emotion. I like the way you think.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I like the omission of details in the piece leaving the reader to wonder; like the old actor said, "always leave them wanting more" Good write!

[MagiCrystal]

Bravo....100% Magical.. this is one poem I have to read over and over again..!