Novocaine

Novocaine

 

We met on a hot night on the isle of Capri

We walked long the seaside, her leaning on me

We stopped on a bench neath a magic palm tree

I casually dropped my hand to her knee

 

That was the first mistake I made on that night

My jawbone in pain as she took serious slight

A night that I thought could have ended in bliss

Ended in pain, courtesy of a black-belted miss

 

When she left me I was flat out on the ground

I tried to talk but could not make a sound

Then a street cleaner pushing trash all around

Ensured it was next morning, before I was found

 

Surprisingly, we have often dated again

My improved manners, now deeply ingrained

Even when she annoys me, I never complain

Tho’ endlessly now, I require novocaine

 

Reviews

[Moonie]

Witty and fast paced! As a doctor, I was obviously drawn from the title itself. It's a fun read, and it's true, in all relationships, you do need to go through the painful times to fully enjoy the beautiful moments.

[john l smith]

so true, tho a shot of mace to the face may have also kept him in place.
How many rejected lover's jaws have you had to reset?

[Chris Shaw]

So full of imagery, I loved the way your lines flowed and so amusing to read. A real fun poem for another cold and wet day. Warmed my heart it did Dave.

Chris

[emmajoy]

' Even when she annoys me, I never complain - Tho’ endlessly now, I require novocaine '

Love it, love it! Laughed aloud and, undoubtedly, will think those lines, those goings-on through a busy day. Fine meter throughout a trip down memory lane/ True or not, not asking.

[john l smith]

Thanks Emmajoy
Have a blathery day

[Stella Armour]

Haha, well she sure made it clear what the score was, you were very brave going back for mem ..

[john l smith]

lesson learned............

[Robert Trakofler]

peremptory penance payments per passions perplexion predicament painful! Ha this made me laugh I think however i would endure the occasional Novocaine shot for a good love anywho!! I liked the flow and thyme scheme and the story was great LOL

[Samuel Dickens]

Isn't this just like life? Romance is painful, man! I should've given you Seducy-Lucy's phone number--she only hurts your wallet. I now add "street sweeper" to my "stay away from" list. This one made me laugh!

[john l smith]

Seducy-Lucy sounds awful sweet, although my wallet hopes that we never meet
And a Merry X-mess 2U

[Rana]

How it begins on a hot night and ends in a warm ending, good humor and a sense of plot, progressing the poem, even with a lesson, this bit if I may quote,
"Then a street cleaner pushing trash all around
Ensured it was next morning, before I was found"
-a double take before I smiled, he was supposed to help he rather dis-helps, ingenious lines, and the title leaves the reader with allusions, very subtly revealed, deliciously indirect. It is so beautiful. The rhymes are so neat. There's reflection and recollection, past and the present. If I may offer suggestions, "her leaning on me" could flow better as "the lady leaning on me" or "her form leaning on me". This line "I casually dropped my hand to her knee" could make it fit even better with the sounds of the stanza with, "a lingering hand" in place of "my hand". A word here, "my jawbone flinched in pain as..". All in all, a refreshing poem to stumble upon.

[john l smith]

Pleased you were refreshed by your 'stumble'
Dave B