Red Rocket Running Shoes

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Red Rocket Running Shoes

 

Igor rigged two radical red rocket shoes

Guaranteed to vanquish any victim

He felt that by wearin these two

A lot of ghoul gobblin he’d be inflictin

 

The last human he’d chased, got away

And he was resolved to solve that situation

So come dark of night, the start of his day

He’d instigate some inspirational chasin   

 

Down the dark street, first victim came

Lookin like a particularly pretty piece of game

A pleasantly plump package on a hike down the pike

As delightful devourin she’d be something he’d like

 

He hummed to himself as she drew near

Salivating at her sweet succulent scent sent

He would start chomping below each ear

Then continue until, she was completely absent

 

He lecherously launched out of the woods

But his red rocket runners ran ahead, instead

Propelling him under a passing semi-trucks bed

That sped speedily over his head

 

 

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

ha ha, i love this what a great blend of word salad! i love the irony at the end and you create your own special intuitive flow in this that grabs you from the start. I enjoyed this one very much Igor the wiley coyote vampire is an awesome character to bad his head got crushed cause i would love to hear more of his exploits

[john l smith]

Thanks for visit
I think his day is done but rumors persist of an understudy 'baby blue blast-off boots' that may surface next halloween
Dave B

[Robert Trakofler]

LOL vampires are so misunderstood these days

[john l smith]

HaHa, very funny
Just doing their thing

[Ken Simm.]

This is a superb monologue in the style of Moore Marriot. Although Marriot didn't write about vampires as far as I know. I'm glad I came to it through Margie. Excellent piece of whimsy.

[john l smith]

Thanks for visit
I don't know Moore Marriot so that is something I will update thanks to your reference
Appreciate your visit
Dave B

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Nemesis wow fine and sensational, is this referring to a true account? It is a great poem how you describe the perverted man and everything else in super rhyme and wording as well. Kudos.

Soo nice to read from your inking again, pleez do comment/add your thoughts/ review my newest poem too. I like saying hi to poets and poetry.

[john l smith]

He will be less of a problem now to society, esp, on halloween night
Thanks 4 visit
Dave B

[NotUsinganymore]

Very whitty. Somehow it made me think about a person who was killed in a hit and run accident getting his revenge on the killer.

[john l smith]

Thanks JungLee
Just another crazy vampire
Dave

[CLR9]

It's pretty dang good. I wonder what the truck driver did after.

[john l smith]

Crazy truck drivers
Probably went vampire hunting
Thanks for visit
Dave

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Perfect food for thought and a perfect example of Karma. We need more of this in the world. Thanks for posting. :-)

[john l smith]

Hello Tamara
You are quite right only in this case it was Truckma (sorry, can't help myself)
Thanks for visit
Dave

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

You're too witty, john. Enjoy the holidays. :-)

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Call me weird - but after reading this, all I could think of was a certain President (with orange shoes) eager to run after and chomp up a fake fat newswoman presenter. His demise seems fated to end the same way! Funny how metaphorical thoughts twist and turn in one's brain! Loved the write - great fun read! :=)

[john l smith]

Hello Phil
One of the nicest aspects of his being is the accommodating target he makes
Glad you enjoyed
Dave

[barleygirl]

As you know, I love your snappy rhythm & rhyme -- most of the time! But this time the bounce isn't quite there. I love your somewhat complicated way of observing things & manicuring your delightful word choices into a sassy commentary. You've done all that as well as usual here. But this poem has the same problem as many of my own do . . . it doesn't exactly roll off the tongue! (Reading this helps me recognize better when I'm doing it). Still, your title is the height of originality for spooky writing! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[john l smith]

Oh Margie!!!!
I always thought you only said nice things
Actually, I don't mind constructive criticism. I am fairly new to all this and have not at all entered the world of syllable count and line matching or the many other nuances of correct poetry.
I'll try to do better, promise!
Thanks for your honesty
Dave

[Onlyme]

I loved this witty, interesting, fun and very cool seasonal ghoulish poem. Thanks for sharing John.

[john l smith]

you are welcome Dawn
he was a nasty fellow

[Onlyme]

He sounded quite a charactor also.

[Einstein Noodle]

ghoulishly fun .. :) he got his just deserts eh!?
E.

[john l smith]

Definitely deserved a head crushing

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ..................