Burnt Out Star

Burnt Out Star

A Poem by @juliza

I look at you and see nothing but pure beauty

Except I never gave myself a chance

I Tried

But I kept being torn away by my own mistakes

I would follow you anywhere

But you're shining like a fallen star

To radiant for me


The fear of being left behind

Covers me in the darkness of night

I thought I could be with you

But my chance was gone before I knew it was there

You to great for me to stand for


I was once a star in your sky

But now I float in space

Watching

Wishing

Burnt out


Now I stand in a pit dug by my own sorrow

And all I can do is look up and hope

Hope for a glimpse of you


-Julia + Liz

© 2015 @juliza


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Yearning for that one that makes the heart glide in glee

Well done
I think this is very well penned

Posted 9 Years Ago


Love it! It's a deep, radical poem. I can tell you're a good writer, so keep it up! One thing though: You should work on grammar, because your writing will be taken more seriously if it has good grammar. But other than that, nice work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


"I was once a star in your sky" too darn true for many of us; great poem!

Posted 9 Years Ago


@juliza

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
I think most of us can relate to the greatest impediment of our happiness....ouselves....excellent write Juliza :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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@juliza

9 Years Ago

thank you very much!
I love this. It's sad but beautiful and really shows voice.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

@juliza

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
Very sad.though nicely written. And beautiful. Keep writing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

@juliza

9 Years Ago

thanks for the review!

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@juliza
@juliza

Portland , ME



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Just two best friends breaking into writing. We spend most of our time writing and LOVE it! Our main interests are diving, color guard, swimming, running, and of course, writing. We would love your in.. more..

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