Firsts

what happens at the beginning doesn't end the same

First you cry,

As darkness turns to light.

Then you cry,

In the darkness of the night.

First you smile,

As joy fills your heart.

Then you smile,

To hide your broken parts

First you laugh,

As you look forward to the morrow.

Then you laugh,

To mask your sorrow.

First you kiss,

As to share the love have.

Then you kiss,

Because you can't fight back.

First you fall,

As you scrape your knee.

Then you fall,

For the pain you need.

First you die,

As you whisper your last words.

Not because your time had come,

But because it hurts

 

Author's Note

Criticism is welcomed :)

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

I love the simple flow of complex ideas here.
This is a wonderful poem.

Keep writing with such amazing ideas.
Make sure you always record your ideas as soon as you feel them in your soul. Make sure you write and date your poems everytime.
Express your ideas freely. Think outside the box. Through your poems, show the world from your unique perspective.

You have a serious talent. Keep practicing to be good at your art. Read books and write more with discipline, passion and dedication. Make each poem unique like songs are unique in their own right.

WELL DONE

[Elizabeth]

wow this is an amazing poem. the flow is great, and i love the last stanza
"First you die,
As you whisper your last words.
Not because your time had come,
But because it hurts"
great read