Once upon a time

they told her fairy-tales come true.they told her happy endings.so she tried.but no-our world is not a fairy-tale.it ins't perfect.they told her only princesses can be happy.so she tried to be one.

once upon a time

there was a girl

who lived in a tower

which she herself had to climb

no prince to save her

and she had no superpower

hair in a messy bun

accompanied by a sweatshirt

dark patches under her eyes

you could see that she was hurt

no bills to cover up her wounds

just ordinary dirt

no tiara on her head 

for once she did flirt

but she never wanted to be

trapped in his bed

tears down her face

which she herself had to wipe

no lace left on her dress

no one saw her load and snipe

Author's Note

they killed her.

Reviews

[Matthew James Ginn]

Awesome writing about the malevolent expectations of society for girls about romance and the unrealstic nature of thinking happy endings are a sure thing. I like it lol and im a guy.

Rhythm is a little strange at some points. Try to make most lines fit together more cohesively to make the fluency better. This will make it easier to read and more memorable.
ex: accompanied by a sweatshirt/ dark patches under her eyes/you could see that she was hurt

[yashmita13]

thanks for the feedback
glad you enjoyed it
i will work on it

[mattavelli]

I get the feeling this girl is angry. Maybe she resents the her tower home and the stairs. I lived in a sixth floor apartment with no stairs. It was bad sometimes. Thanks for sharing.

[Helen Crutchett]

Dear Yashmita13,

Please check the challenge rules again. If you need help with it, I will explain.

thank you,

Helena

[Coyote Poetry]

A modern day fairytale. I like the honest tone leading to the sad ending. Few fairytale can come true. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[DoormanDan]

This may just be me, but this poem felt like it had fairy tale elements to it, which I absolutely love. This poem definitely shows that you are a creative writer! Keep up the amazing work! :)

[Crowsef]

Congratulations on winning a prize at our writing competition! My favourite thing about this poem is that I get some more meaning from it the more I read it. Here's our original review for it: While simple on the face of it, this poem is incredibly complex. While the main thrust of it involves deconstructing the typical narrative of a princess, using the meter of a fairytale, it is the last two lines that really stand out. Initially they seem like filler, closing lines for the earlier rhyme, but when you really think about them, the most sinister they get.

[yashmita13]

thank you so much

[rashu]

oh my god ..u portayed the true realities of life that are far away from those shown in multiplexes or cinemas..
u really showed me the mirror of what reality is..
but still i would say there are happy endings atleast with few lucky souls:)
amazing use of words ..
simple yet impressive,.

[yashmita13]

thank you so much

[TL Boehm]

Found this wrenching and eloquent. There are no happy endings and it is achingly sad

[yashmita13]

there MIGHT be happy endings, but frankly i havnt seen one yet, only realistic ones

[Skai Rain]

This was an amazing read. Please, please, attempt to turn this into a novel or at least a short story. Also, this makes me think of a musical I was in xD

[yashmita13]

id love to turn it into a novel or a story, but im scared that i might end up spoiling it. playing it a little safe here. hehe

[Tara Togoland]

just my idea of a perfect story.....someone gets to die...Lol...I really enjoyed reading this.

[yashmita13]

im glad.
plus, i love killing people

[Tara Togoland]

really? me too! I'm so excited to have found someone who loves the idea of killing people as much as I do....creepy huh?;)