'Twas hot

Nothing consoles you when bad news hits You walk like a ghost Have no taste

The drink
The tea
'Twas hot
And sweet
She was so
Unsteady on those feet

The news
The terrible news
Her sister passed on
Nothing could hold her steady
Now
Not even her
Hot strong sweet tea
Or her strong gentle mother

The tea 'twas hot
The tea sweet and strong
And hot like that
Yet both tasted it not

They may as well have been
Drinking mud
They will never forget
This day
This terrible day

The two they sat
Salted sweet tears mixed in those hot sweet drinks
They tasted it not
It choked like mud
It tasted like
An ocean of salt
Of tears and fears and
Guilty years
And that 'twas that

No tea leaf reader
Could of predicted that

And that was that
The drink ''twas hot
It comforted not

And that was that

Reviews

[Onlyme]

Really makes you feel the power of someone dying. And how it instantly affect you. And how your body and mind react in hearing such news.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

yes thanks so much

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Even this poem have sad tones. Way of flow is very playful and can bring smile on reader's face. Simple but with strong beautiful impact and reader on the end can feel little lift up. Is not wonderful ?

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

thanks for your very kind review

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Thanks Jacob
For your insight and review

[jacob erin-cilberto]

when our heart is breaking, our bodies react...we have no choice---it's just an innate reaction...

j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

thanks Jacob for your kind review 9 months ago i believe, so sorry i left it this late