The rock pool

Made this up You can make your own story up about it I did Pic of my fav spot Avoca beach nsw

Kneeling
At the rock
He found her
In that Rockpool
Up the coast
He found his
Long lost
Wife
He looked he saw her reflection
Her laughing eyes
Her starfish gaze
In purple green azure blue
He saw her there
He looked behind but alas
The rocks were bare
But only an old
Faded beach towel
Left there
Gone hard and stiff
Like fossil at. Those steep Cliff stairs
She once a swimmer
Like a dolphin in the deep
She always had to be
And he on surfboard
All alone again at one
With sea
Her starfish eyes  eyes they belonged in there that rockpool so deep and all at one with sea and sand and gulls so blind

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Poignant, mysterious poem with amazing picture. Lovely form and flow with elegant language and vivid imagery of the sea- "her starfish gaze in purple green azure blue"...was it a dream or did he join his "long lost wife" by suicide in the welcoming sea? Is this a mermaid fantasy? Beautiful, haunting, great.

[Great Aunt Astri]

I like this poem. People often see their lost loves in things around. I think your man is happy to know she is part of the sea, on which he continues to surf. I don't think it is morbid,.... just natural.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Yes thanks I agree

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Annette I like to think he lived on not joined her but it's up to reader

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I wrote it as he saw her image in the reflection but as he looked behind she was not there then he saw her beach towel she left a month ago gone hard as she left it before she walked up steep cliff to her demise either by her choice or accident Maybe too morbid a friend hated it

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I personally wrote it not as a true story but only came to the ending in my mind as I wrote it I'll discuss later after maybe a few more reviews but it can mean anything and all they like to imagine to each reader as they choose

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

It can be read any way you like thanks for all the reviews xx

[emmajoy]

'Like fossil at. Those steep Cliff stairs
She once a swimmer
Like a dolphin in the deep
She always had to be '

Read once: thought of a nightmare, a surreal future perhaps.. a dread of what might be.
Re-read, a tragedy he still walks through.
Read again: perhaps at a time of decision, whether to find a wife and lose her.. or not.

To be honest, I can't decide on your thoughts when writing this. Maybe it's meant to be a mystery forever?!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Review welcome
Give me thoughts on what u think this represents it's an open slate