Last poem

I'm imagining I'm dying and this is my last fling with pen before I go try to listen to on u tube music the following 'oh very young one" by CAt Stevens.

Don't be sad
Cos this ain't so very bad
I've lived loved hated made mistakes and buried quite a few

I've bore kids and been a young and pretty bride
I've travelled on a boat across the seas
And even done a horseback ride
I've slept near campfire in my youth
And looked up to the Milky Way
Before my eyes closed for that day

I've flown to three places
That's more than most
I've lied on beaches in my youth and
I've felt warm like hot buttered oily toast
I've gone for dips in ocean blue
And caught maybe a crab and a fish too
I've seen my share of sunsets sunrises and moons and stars
I've eaten lollies after school
And kept fun diaries like we do

I've loved more than one man through my years
And eaten Chinese through break up tears
I've raised my kids and proud of them
But not sure I'll ever be a nan
I've had my fun my share of tears
And so my dear I think it's my time now to
Maybe
Gently SLOWLY SILENTLY disappear

Reviews

[Moonie]

Okay that idea is well conveyed..and I get to feel a bitter-sweetness throughout the poem...I like how this idea shaped in your head...innovative...my favourite lines would be:
"I've lied on beaches in my youth and 
I've felt warm like hot buttered oily toast "

You've taken care with every line, and your effort and hard work shows! Well done! :))

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Thanks so much x I wrote it quickly on weekend as I do I cram my weekend with writing thanks for kind reviews

[Moonie]

You're most welcome! :)))

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Any review welcome please