darkness

midnight,  the  darkess  hour

sunlight  ceased  to  exsist

darkness  rowming  the  streets

streetlights  killing  the  darkness

 

as  midnight  passes  dawn  aproches

the  stars  begin  to  hide  as  the  darkness  lightens

moon  oh  moon  says  goodbye

as  time  passes  by 

the  moon  lowers  from  the  great  blue  sky

 

the  darkness  disapers  as  the  sun  rises

the  darkness  has  faded  away

shadows  are  the  only  darkness  left

shadows  cold  dark  and  alone

rowming  from  city  to  city  hiding  from  the  light

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

my friend jessica inspired me to write this peom

Reviews

[Bryan A.]

Again, a very nice piece, I think this one is my favorite that I've read so far. Really great writing, keep it up.

[Rick Puetter]

Dear julie,

While not as strong as "River Moon", this is another fine write, with good imagery and mood.

Very best regards,

Rick

[HorHay3]

very good.
you should try to think of stronger word to rhyme with.
But anyway great write!

[nocturnalbeast]

powerful!
[[once edited, this will be awesome.]]

[Sean Augy]

interesting. i get what you're saying but i would just recommend to edit it, try to strengthen the rhyme scheme and rhythm of this poem. also you said 'rowming' instead of 'roaming'