Diamond Knuckles

I have a pair of brass knuckles

Fit around my fingers

Put on as a habit

In case anyone gets too close

I suppose the preferable course

would be diamond rings

Fitted by memory

Slipped on by him

A proclamation

Girl, you are loved

Brass knuckles, my damnation

Girl, you have loved

Maybe that's why I'm so attracted to

those diamond studded brass knuckles

In the shop window

Cut out the middle man

Reviews

[Elwyn]

AND ANOTHER THING:
the repetition of "Girl, you are loved" and "Girl, you have loved" HIT ME SO HARD. For reals, thinking about it all day (as I casually review this poem again 11 hours later). There's such a transition from FEELING LOVED, to feeling like yours is un-reciprocated. And I like the starkness of the comparison. LOVE it actually, truth be told. I kind of want this tattooed on my body so I can show it off and be like, "THIS IS HOW I FEEL." It'd be easier than trying to use my own words, you know? Anyways, love this.

[Elwyn]

I :) f*****g :) love :) this :)

because being hurt by the one you love feels EXACTLY like this. You want to punch things, and break things, and hurt things, and anyone who comes near you, even those with the kindest intentions, are not permitted to get too close and you remind them with brass knuckles. I'm biased, but this may be my favorite (lol I say that about all of your stuff though). I just hate how much this poem makes me feel. Ironically, it has a very vulnerable undertone to it. It's more of the act of being tough, wearing them because you're paranoid of getting hurt again. Very clever. Really great concept, really great execution.

[mattavelli]

This was fun to read. thanks for sharing.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

I really felt this one! I loved the hard lines and sass that is represented. I really loved the comparison between wedding rings and brass knuckles and the that last night ... wow man it floored me.

You have a gift. Awesome

[Closing Thoughts]

Alright, so I was just listening to Eminem and, maybe that's why, I sort of took this as an aggressive rappy poem. Brass knuckles in general are aggressive. The tone of this poem seems angry and hurt, but not weak. I like the repetition of "Girl, you are loved" very much. It's a short piece but extremely powerful and I love it. Thanks for sharing! 100/100