A man smoking on a rainy day

A man smoking on a rainy day

A Poem by Julia

your eyes
kill me inside 
my lips
pucker when i see your face
your scent
forever in my nose
you smell like a man smoking on a rainy day

your teeth are cracked 
your smile is crooked 
you look at me with envy
i look at you with disgust
nobody can see you
stop hiding

if you don't care
why should i
if you don't love 
why do i 
you hate
why can't i

you are a mixture of my emotions 
but they all can't get though
just love me
like i love you 

© 2014 Julia


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Unrequited love, with someone torn with harsh years.
He hates you, but you love him, not showing it, though.
I love the story, and the lines,
"you smell like a man smoking on a rainy day"
"if you don't care
why should i
if you don't love
why do i
you hate
why can't i
you are a mixture of my emotions
but they all can't get though
just love me
like i love you"

Well done. ^^

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Julia

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much
Bluefire

10 Years Ago

No problem. ^^



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I found this poem very enjoyable, emotion hung from every word, very well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


You're a great writer and this is a great poem. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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i find this poem little funny and very emotional. i like your words how they seduce my emotional part of my brain

Posted 10 Years Ago


I AM a fan!! This is the first poem I've seen on here since I joined a couple days ago that I really liked!

Posted 10 Years Ago



"if you don't care
why should i
if you don't love
why do i
you hate
why can't i"


Posted 10 Years Ago


Julia

10 Years Ago

Thank you a lot
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)..................
This poem was simple yet the reason it won is the fact I could smell the man and feel what the person who saw him which was the objective of the contest bravo .

Posted 10 Years Ago


Love the sensuality and passion involve in this piece...great work

Posted 10 Years Ago


Unrequited love, with someone torn with harsh years.
He hates you, but you love him, not showing it, though.
I love the story, and the lines,
"you smell like a man smoking on a rainy day"
"if you don't care
why should i
if you don't love
why do i
you hate
why can't i
you are a mixture of my emotions
but they all can't get though
just love me
like i love you"

Well done. ^^

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Julia

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much
Bluefire

10 Years Ago

No problem. ^^
"you are a mixture of my emotions
but they all can't get though
just love me
like i love you"

A splendid read and write...Bravo................

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Julia

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

:)..........................

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Last Updated on March 24, 2014
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