love

it is said that nothing is right or wrong in love. at teenage, this is not exactly the same..any turn may go wrong..at this stage, what we feel like, is my motive, to show here.

Feeling of love,
is it wrong to love?
its a feeling that can bring,
paradise on earth;
but we have to hide,
is loving you a crime?
"No cuz we have to be good,
in our parent's eye."
Arent we mature?
I m 18, and you even more.
they think we are just kids,
and cant decide,
how to feel on our own?
"No, they think our good,
and dont want things to get puzzled,
but at this point,
they will misunderstand our love.
If you can wait,
for the right time , my dear.
I will get a degree, a decent job,
then i will propose you,
in front of all."
if they reject our love?
"No, they wont cuz they will know,
you are my princess, and believe me dear,
we will always be together. "

Author's Note

hey, its not a love poem..i want to ask something. you can say poem was a picture of the story going. i know you have lots of questions why i wrote this, or maybe what i was thinking. good..i m confused too. the poem i wrote, its common thought, but is it correct to hide? parents will not agree for this...and thats why we hide. what u think..is it the right choice?
answer in reviews. both positive and negative views are welcomed. :)

Reviews

[Ena Lona Kendra]

Below are a few editions I made on misspelled words
In the most part I loved it

Feeling of love,
is it wrong to love?
its a feeling that can bring,
paradise on earth;
but we have to hide,
is loving you a crime?
"No cuz we have to be good,
in our parent's eye."
Aren't we mature?
(I'm)I m 18, and you even more.
they think we are just kids,
and cant decide,
how to feel on our own?
"No, they think our(we're) good,
and don't want things to get puzzled,
but at this point,
they will misunderstand our love.
If you can wait,
for the right time , my dear.
I will get a degree, a decent job,
then I will propose you,
in front of all."
if they reject our love?
"No, they wont cuz they will know,
you are my princess, and believe me dear,
we will always be together. "

[ayesha gupta]

thanks . i will correct it. anyways, that was your view on poem, have you read "aurthor's note" , i asked a question. i hope you dont mind thinking about it a minute and texting a comment. :)

[ayesha gupta]

hey, btw "our good" means what is good for us. arent those words conveying the meaning?

[ayesha gupta]

hey, btw "our good" means what is good for us. arent those words conveying the meaning?

[Ena Lona Kendra]

Do as you please. Don't let your parents get in the way.they don't know what your feelings are and they can't know unless they are you. And they can't. So yes I think its right

[Sreenath]

Sorry to say. I didn't enjoy this poem.. sorry for that words. The only reason being you have the idea but the expression is way to stereotype.. keep writing, keep reading you will get there. Keep smiling

[Saddam]

A very reliable thought with the eyes of a teen. Now it will bring the change.
I thought that it is very amazing piece of the day.
Loved it. Thanks for sharing this amazing piece.

[ayesha gupta]

thankyou so much. :)

[Kuldeep desai]

I understood properly when read it for 3rd time........But when understood it felt good it is different and thought provoking.....

[ayesha gupta]

thanks for review.

[Surya pradha]

it is the right choice, ayesha, but you have to think from their perspective too. enjoyed this poem!

[ayesha gupta]

thanks for review.

[Prabha Salimath]

Yes exactly dear I did conceal the matter when I was at my teen fearing they would stop my studies so.
I have passed teen still I can't take decision for this issue. Bcoz if everything is revealed don't know what parents will take a move, if not I feel like its betrying. Sorry no answer for this but I like the poem and its flow lovely.

I never believe everything is fair in love and war bcoz it may reach to the height of insanity and let them to kill themselves. No life is worth a futile path.

[ayesha gupta]

thanks for review

[Nikki]

Sweep. I think love knows no bounds.. Speaking from experience I can say that I have let loves go because of disapproval for petty reasons.. Where I felt supporting was the key, they thought erasing was.. So this is something that you must ask your heart for only yours truly knows. :)

[ayesha gupta]

thanks a lot for advice

[Nikki]

You're most welcome my dear. :)

[The Black Warrior]

This is cute!

Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed reading this poem.

~SUK

[ayesha gupta]

thanks a lot ,suk. :) m glad that you liked it.

[The Black Warrior]

You are very welcome...thank you for sharing!

[Prakruti]

Nicely written Ayesha..I liked the obvious feelings and difficulties you have explained here.
Apart from this, it is always good to fall in love. But when you are a teenager, it is difficult for your parents to accept your relationship. Although everyone has different perspective about relationship, I would say it is ok to fall in love at any age, but never forget your priorities are your studies, career and parents right now.
Keep loving. Keep smiling :)

[ayesha gupta]

thanks a lot for advice. the idea and question were inspired by your "letter" to your future daughter. so, thanks for the idea too. :)

[Avanthika]

the poem has the answer in itself, to fall in love is never a crime , but we all want to be good in our parents eye and we just wait for this right time to come to say about our love. Hardly very few agree to our choices.

[ayesha gupta]

so, your answer goes with 'waiting for right time'. ok. thanks for review.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Being in love is always right but when you fell in love with a wrong person, love seems to be wrong, it is same as one try to sow seeds on a stone, the results are failure, Parents s fear for their wards are true as they dont wish wrong person in there life
good job and good question ayesha

[ayesha gupta]

thanks a lot ,sir. :)