In Lieu Of Something To Say

It's too hard for me to begin tonight
I had words written, but they just aren't right

It has to be exact, when I begin my song
But I also have to construct it, before too long

If I wait much longer and keep the suspense
You may slowly disappear with less and less interest

If you looked inside, you would see such a riot
I am afraid of this, and yet I keep quiet

I can see your feelings and know they are true
So I don't understand my difficulty, and I wish you knew

How do I stop just once to say
That you make me crave your desirable way

Just like yummy strawberries with delicious whipped cream
Your style is so sweet, like a beautiful dream

Something about the perfect demeanor that you behold
Keeps me longing to be with you, hoping someday to grow old

With your brightest eyes glistening directly at me
I believe I am blinded, and I wish to never see

Especially if what you have compelled my way
Has all been honest and true, and without decay

Your heart is much stronger than I can conceive
Your heart is much larger, it's so hard to believe

Hard to believe of a man so true
Hard for me to realize, because it's all so new

You have beauty a thousand miles wide
The kind of beauty that from me,  never can hide

You may not realize who you are to me
You may not understand all that I have seen

Your laughter, jokes, and humorous play
Has definitely gained my heart to forever stay

All the above doesn't do any justice of you
It doesn't even compare of things you make my heart do

Like a fish, I flip and flop, waiting to breathe
When you hold me so close, I feel your dreams

I was hoping to finish up my lengthy song
In hopes that something would end up and belong

Everything written above, that of which I drew
Has all been said in lieu of a simple "I love you"

 

Reviews

[Michael]

This is a beautiful use of couplets. So often poets use them to make a deep point and come off sounding too light-hearted, as that is the nature of couplets. You use of line length with internal pauses keeps that at from happening. I also like the eye-rhymes used rather than compromising the context of the lines.


Very good work!