Four and a half minutes

Not much a margin of error,

especially if I want to make a point.

Let yourself give in,

and wither away.

Try and help,

and grow like a vine.

Give of yourself,

fruit for the needy.

Wine for the thirsty.

Use this as a test.

Make sure I still feel.

Like the Stones say,

"it's just a kiss away."

Reviews

[Lorry]

Seems so easy to think it is simple to make a point in such a short space of time, but with time limits, it would probably end up not being the point intended...At least in my case anyway. I'd need a double album worth of time for that I think :)
Love the "fruit for the needy, wine for the thirsty" Superb.

[Jon Roggie]

I do this, now and again. A new write, compressed by a song. Honestly, all an improv.