All a dream

Impromptu collaboration. I was joined by jacob erin-cilberto, KL Goode, Papaya, and Corset. Hopefully this meets their approval.

If only for a moment,

I let my soul drift.

Seeing a world so different.

One hiding behind the nightmare...

but that nightmare really gets in the way,

and the better world seems a dream if we can make it there.

Just beyond reach.

Yet reality is a mire, a funeral pyre.

The underneath always makes its way to the surface.

A facade of happiness where horror exists...

Life. 

I look at this,

and sadly smile.

So many choose to accept the reality around them.

I look for a way to change the world around me.

Reviews

[Papaya]

A facade of happiness where horror exists...

Life.

[Jon Roggie]

Now, do I leave it on a down note?

[Papaya]

No, social responsibility...

[Papaya]

Just came to smile upon this one. :)
Again

[Jon Roggie]

You made me find the finish.

[Papaya]

Yup, I noticed. :D

[Jon Roggie]

This reminded me of a game. Friend of mine, and I would talk in lyrics from songs.

[Papaya]

Yeah, I've done that. Some days I think my life is a musical...

[Jon Roggie]

[Lyn Anderson]

The underneath always makes its way to the surface.

[Jon Roggie]

Nice one....

[Corset]

If we can make it there..just beyond reach, yet reality is a mire, a funeral pyre.

[Jon Roggie]

Add this after jacob's review. Sounds good, but still incomplete.

[Corset]

lol, hey someone needs to grab the next line

[Jon Roggie]

May I post your line?

[Corset]

I was hoping someone would grab it and continue :) A collective :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

but that nightmare really gets in the way...and the better world seems a dream.

[Jon Roggie]

This could be the next line, and then add Corset's. Sorry, I can't help myself.

[Corset]

If we can make it there..just beyond reach, yet reality is a mire, a funeral pyre.

[Shannon]

I like the bleak hope here. Language is dark, but message maybe not.

[Jon Roggie]

Sometimes, you have to stop, and see the beauty around us. Little things go unnoticed.

[mattavelli]

Hello, Jon! :)
I like the short ones. This one is deep and meaningful, downhearted, yet hopeful.

[Jon Roggie]

There is always hope. Thank you.

[Jon Roggie]

Mind what it turned into?