All a dream

All a dream

A Poem by Jon Roggie
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Impromptu collaboration. I was joined by jacob erin-cilberto, KL Goode, Papaya, and Corset. Hopefully this meets their approval.

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If only for a moment,
I let my soul drift.

Seeing a world so different.

One hiding behind the nightmare...
but that nightmare really gets in the way,
and the better world seems a dream if we can make it there.
Just beyond reach.
Yet reality is a mire, a funeral pyre.
The underneath always makes its way to the surface.
A facade of happiness where horror exists...

Life. 
I look at this,
and sadly smile.
So many choose to accept the reality around them.
I look for a way to change the world around me.

© 2016 Jon Roggie


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Such graceful and touching piece.. This poem somehow reminds me of me.. Nicely done..

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jon Roggie

6 Years Ago

I love a collaboration, and I had great poets join in. It would only have been three or four lines!
Teamwork has produced an intriguing write – and reflects the subject matter – because working positively can make this a better world – nice piece! :-)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jon Roggie

6 Years Ago

Even though this one has grown older, I still like the way it worked. The early comments show the p.. read more
Lovely write and collaboration, be the change you want to see the world.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jon Roggie

7 Years Ago

Thank you. We can only try to change. If five people can randomly write, and off of three lines, w.. read more
Ah, fragmented hopes laying within a bubble of thoughts and ideas, all Im reading today is about dreams, looks like we have many here who know how to travel beyond the mind. If only a sink into such clouds could keep us from reaching back to Earth, but gravity humbles even the most greatest man. There is no doubt, we live outside of our true selves


Posted 7 Years Ago


Jon Roggie

7 Years Ago

Dreams are only a glimpse. Each of us can try, and fall into bitter failure. Still, you made the a.. read more
Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

The pleasure is mine. Will be reading around. Glad to find an adventurous mind.
Jon Roggie

7 Years Ago

Stop by anytime.
Love your poetry!
I think this is my favourite line "and the better world seems a dream if we can make it there."


Posted 7 Years Ago


Jon Roggie

7 Years Ago

This one was fun.
I believe the line you liked was jacob erin-cilberto's. If you haven't a.. read more
Underneath it all is a fire, a pyre for the liars in the mire... Just beyond reach, a hope-spangled beach... Wonderful work, and we should always be looking for ways to affect positive change... Nicely penned...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jon Roggie

7 Years Ago

Thank you. I am sure the other four writers thank you as well.
apennylate

7 Years Ago

I have read their writing, and you are all very talented, kudos again to all... My pleasure
Beautifully written. And well expressed. I believe in a way, its best we face reality but once we do, we must than work on seeing what can be done, to make reality more livable, and to help improve it as a whole.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jon Roggie

7 Years Ago

I still like how this one developed. I think the mix of voices adds to it. I don't think any of my.. read more
Maria

7 Years Ago

Interesting. Well truly captivated me and I really enjoyed it.
I understand the logic and the need of the poem. Last lines I want too.
"I look for a way to change the world around me."
Thank you Jon for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jon Roggie

7 Years Ago

I realize you know the entire group on this one. I think all of us started with a somber mood. I w.. read more
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

You did and you are welcome Jon.
The final line is philosophical and true. We can indeed change the world around us, if only in our perceptions.. I like the ....'s -extending the 'nightmare' and the 'horror' into further realms This is complimented by 'the better world seems a dream if we can only make it there.'. all are a little out of reach. I enjoyed your poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jon Roggie

7 Years Ago

My fellow writers gave me a chance to play with their words. Started with three lines, and grew fro.. read more
In a way, your collaboration is experimental, prepared in part here for folk to see. What an interesting process, what an intriguing and very worthwhile finish.

Won't select quotes, would be unfair, but some lines ring a bell so distinctly to your meter, albeit a loose one. You are all such fine poets, complimenting each other and yet, it seems, being true to your individual needs and thoughts

Our world is what it is - no thanks to Man. Tis a rushing river that sweeps its bed every inch of its winding course, debris full, darker than dark.. etc. as suggested said in your fine post.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jon Roggie

7 Years Ago

This was fun. The lines matched. Your lines would have mixed.

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