Drink Consumes all

A Man Went In

A Boy Came Out

Mentally Altered

Changed Beyond A Doubt

His Face Once Strong

Now Hides With A Shout

For The Drink Consumes All

And Few It Spits Back Out

Memories Shattered

Friends Begone

Harshened Melodies

Ever Lasting Dawns

In Dangers Face

The Boy Quickly Pales

In The Dim Little Room

Where He Downs His Ale

Reviews

[Tennessee]

It is amazing how this drink can change you. I liked how you stated the stages and changes, good kid.

[yuki]

this is a great peom its really amazing

[Looouise]

All I've got to say is those couplets and the topic make a pretty decent poem. Those first two lines definitely capture the eyes of a reader, they're so simple, yet with the rest of the poem taken into consideration, they're perfect.

[Void Unspoken]

Wow! That turned out really well! I liked it. That's the kind of thing that I'm really into reading and writing and such. I love it! Well written and shows true talent. I really enjoyed reading this. I wish it were longer so that I would be able to read more of this! Keep up the good work and keep writing!!

[Kasey Jones]

Wow. The couplets give this poem such a great rhythm. Strong message and good word choice. It's so descriptive even though it's quite short. The ending...it sums it all up, and it almost leaves you wishing you could have helped.