Love in Retrospect

Reminiscing about the days I started falling in love with my other half.

Love in Retrospect

Years do not wear on the memory of that day,

While others rushed to school, I kept my cool and strolled on in,

Sure she peaked my interest like most of the banks around,

and with curves like road I could name all the corners I'd love to be her banks around.

But that’s just attraction right? Cupid’s trigger happy sibling probably meddling for humor’s sake

And besides I've seen it all, I know what can be expressed from a human’s face

But nothing could have prepared me for this day,

You are just you aren't you?

I looked at your lips and felt despair for not having tasted them,

I imagine yours and mine would collide in symphony, like the dance of the swans,

Our own melody to the song we’d co-write, you’ll never feel like snow white on a slow night.

I see you smile, and I feel exposed, I feel like everyone can see the want building in my eyes,

And as my chest recovers my hands must make the sacrifice, so as I greet you with a hug my body goes numb, the warmth of your touch, the softness of your skin, pleasure knew us personally; oh can we be like this forever?

Nothing could have prepared me for this day.

And the attraction was just a fraction of how I felt,

See, cause my ears also guide me to love and the things you say are soothing to my soul,

Your actions titillate my affections, and my afflictions didn't stand a chance when your vocal chords strummed…

‘Are you OK’?

That was all I needed.

Now there is so much to look forward to, my love is in my Love’s hand, what can I say?

Now your love helps to prepare me for each day.

 

 

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

there definitely is a gentle, rolling quality to this poem. It is almost song like and very romantic

[Samoda]

Thank you so much for your encouraging words.

[Ru Banerjee]

It is a brilliantly written piece, emotional and heartfelt!

Felicitations, and warm wishes,
Ru.

[h d e rushin]

I guess all poems are a sort of retrospection, or those instances of surveying the past. But since
most 'seasoned' love is more remuneration than fellowship (lol) it's better felt than talked about.
They say when couples are together for a long period of time, they start to look alike. Well, it's true.
That's the human need taking over the spirit. "I need your love of me, so let me finish your
sentences for you"/

The final line of this poem is, by far, the most important. In fact, it could just as well be the
first line of the poem, since all else is, once again, remuneration or the recompense for the
equivalence of thus service. But you leave saying damn, I want to be in love like this.
Or, at least, feel similar afflictions that you have.

Nice and beautiful expressions my friend......dana

[Samoda]

Dana I can't tell you how much I appreciate your reviews. You are so right, there is a sense of remuneration that for me often times comes from a level of altruism that blossoms we two people become one.

[Matching Socks]

Beautiful feelings here. Sweet poem. :)

[julia senpai]

I like this a lot! It is very emoitonal and sweet

[julia senpai]

Its so wonderful I like this poem very well you captured a lot of emotion

[Susanna F]

This is beautiful, and really captures the emotions of a new relationship. I love your use of language, simple but intense. My only suggestion, a pet peeve of mine, is the use of the word "peaked." It's actually "piqued" my interest, to provoke or arouse. It gets misused a lot because it is pronounced the same. But what a wonderful poem!!

[Samoda]

Thank you so much Susana. Thanks for the heads up, I didn't actually know that. glad you liked it.

[Loulou4u]

As per your request, I've read your poem. I just joined the silly kids section and writers cafe as well. I think this is well written, but I'm looking for silly/funny/crazy/satire.

[Mila]

Very interesting read, and you made it very personal, which is something I can admire. Great job with this one!

-Mila

[Samoda]

Thank you ever so much. Now if there's any one of your stories or books in particular that you'd like me to return the favor with I'd be more than happy to.

[Daniel Sutheran]

I really admire the personal voice you've given this poem. Also being is gently poetic, it has a very natural and genuine feeling. An original, interesting read.