Melody to My Song

MELODY TO MY SONG

My days range from beaming horizons to lulling plateaus, 

But there is a constant that accompanies the utterance of consonants so well; 

Forget the formalities and alphabetized learning structure,

I like the way you make me feel,

In an instant your strum gently brushes my fears aside, 

like waves on oceans far away, 

Out of sight out of mind right? 

we've been spinning around in confusion; musical chairs,

rain fell, make-up ruined, I was amused by your hair,

Our energy, the rhythm like clock work,

like industrial elves, it would never stop work,

No days off, 

Authenticity pays off, 

Although it would be nice to, recycle, the hard times, and drink chard wine

  

It's been a while since we've been singing this song, 

God knows the lines get monotonous,

but the melody; the melody is constant. 

  So What will it take to ensure that you'll keep giving me the Melody to My Song?

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

lovely lovely. speaks of tempered love and stoking the fire. Well penned

[Kacie Delane Davis]

Wonderful use of imagery. I love the last line. Nice job

[Heaven]

This was wonderful and great use of imagery. The flow is song-like itself.

[Phoen-ix]

This..This is beautiful.
"Forget the formalities and the alphabetized learning structure, I like the way you make me feel."

[Samoda]

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it.

[Jon Roggie]

I like the flow and the message of this. Feels like you may have put in too much. Minor edits will add to the strength of the poem. Overall, I do like it.

[Samoda]

Thank you Jon, I will keep Grammar in mind.

[Jon Roggie]

Forget the grammar. Spread it out a bit. Use the chance to format. Space your words with a blank space making the reader pause. Just like a quiet moment between verses. Hard to explain it.

[Unknown]

I think it's beautifully written! Some repetitiveness, but it works for the rhythm of your poem.

[Samoda]

Thank you, much appreciated

[Lace]

This is great...