The Mom that got away

intriguing

The Mom that got away

She doesn’t know it because in her mind she wasn’t there,
But when she was born for a split second a fusion of love and innocence  Saturated earth’s embodiment.
Now scientist may argue that this was due to some meteoric Activity in outer space but my argument isn’t science; its real life.
It’s the fact that I’ve looked into her eyes and saw something different,
the way she smiles when something is really funny;
jaws a line right beneath her eyes; you can't fake imperfection.
I saw in her every man’s dream and tried to make it my own she saw in me someone to bless with her friendship.
'lets be friends'; those dreaded words plucked my dreams from my grasp like
like the roots of carrots from earth's nesting
and just like earth i felt empty and like dirt
but your words filled that void
for sometimes a special friend being their is equivalent to the most romantic kiss under the moonlight
so I'll admire you constantly and keep your picture centerfold in my mind's gallery
And I dare not talk about her beauty less not this poem never end.
However when life has decided to sneak a couple years by me
 and am sitting with my kids
I will always in secret tell them about their mom that got away.

Author's Note

again guys please try and ignore the grammar, let me know what you think please

Reviews

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

I think you're heart's in the right place. The lines are readable, for the most part. This one is my favorite, don't really know why... just something about it: "and just like earth i felt empty and like dirt" Perhaps it's serious and a little funny at the same time. As you wish, if I ignore the grammar there is little to complain about. The message is the message. If I throw the grammar in, you're in deep doo-doo. ;-)

[Samoda]

thank you, appreciate it...

[s y e]

Flowed really well. Imagery was....Wow! Well done

[Samoda]

thanks

[s y e]

Welcome!

[Pawprints]

Very powerful, and, yes, intriguing.

[Samoda]

thank you :)

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

A beautiful poem. You took me to that place in your heart with your words, your precious memories that still dance in your head. I like the flow of your language. Your words:
"plucked my dreams from my grasp like
like the roots of carrots from earth's nesting"

A great collection of wording

Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry.

[Samoda]

thank you once again, I'll keep trying

[Jessica Jean]

I like this a lot! I think it's a powerful poem. The way I'm reading it is that the speaker in the poem has found a woman who is so incredible and beautiful that he would want to marry her and father her children. But he can't because she wants to remain friends, yet he will still value their friendship as a form of love. I love the ending, where you write "I will always in secret tell them about their mom that got away." It was the perfect ending :)

[Samoda]

you said it perfectly.. that's exactly what i meant