Wonder woman

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Wonder woman

It was no first glance across the ball room floor,
No movie theatrics; for those moments are caressed with music and
Perfect lighting with a directors touch.
Our first meeting vague and dark literally as midnight showed earth
It’s nakedness.
No love at first sight for I was left mesmerized by the way your hair
Was obedient to your shoulders, the tiny oval shining in your eyes,
Lips I imagined to be as soft as the inside of that silky smooth dress
Painted unto your by those delicate fingers. For you it was just some guy
You passed on the way to getting home.
So you linger in my mind and pictures will always flash
And one day will I regret not taking the leap?
Oh how I wonder woman….

Reviews

[Verser]

Of the group, I liked this one best. The first part of the poem is about what she wasn't, and the second part is about she was, at least through your eyes--in a pretty clever way ("Lips I imagined to be as soft..."). Turns out, you never even "met" her at all. The play on Wonder Woman and how the phrase is used at the end is delightful. The imagery here, the detail, is strong. I would try to stick with this technique and this style. Maybe it is your voice.

[Samoda]

thank you very much!

[Saskia Zumdick]

Great one! I thing a lot of people will recognize themselves in this poem.

Kind Regards,
Saskia

[Samoda]

Thank you

[Tasha]

You paint beautiful pictures with your words. This was amazing.

~Tasha

[Heather]

I like it. :) keep up the good work.

[Samoda]

thank you

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

This is terrific example of another free verse (or prose). Your words paint a visual picture and elicits many thoughts to the reader, of a beautiful vision you saw and felt. Very emotive.
Once again though aligning the text to be more eye appealing may help and watch that capital letters do not appearing in the middle of your sentences.
All in all. I think it's very good... I enjoyed reading your writings. Keep up your good work
Blessings...
Anne

[Samoda]

thanks much

[Samoda]

some grammatical errors and some sentences could've been phrased better but i think it came out alright. lemme know what u guys think