Drop

A gruesome, suicidal, nursery rhyme

He fell

He fell far

He fell far in a car

 

Off a cliff

Off a cliff he went

Off a cliff he went, with rapid descent

 

He screamed

He screamed and cried

He screamed and cried and died

 

The anger

The anger made him leave

The anger made him leave, ‘twas all he could perceive

 

A note

A note was made

A note was made; he was afraid

 

Dead

Dead on the ground

Dead on the ground, without a sound

 

His legacy

His legacy of fire

His legacy of fire and ire

 

He fell

He fell far

He fell far in a car

Reviews

[Sourav]

Liked the way you've written the poem. Nicely done.

[Inci]

very nice.."gruesome nursery rhyme"...the flow is great

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was interesting as well. I really really like this poem. Thanks for sharing :D

[Robyn]

interesting form, but i think it was a great form to use.
nice work with this

[Funk]

Sounds sad but sounds honest like a sudden approach to an event. I do think it's great in content and in form. Good expression

Thank you for sharing,,,
Funk

[Vanna Renee]

Very interesting, it makes you wonder and crave for more, Keep it up :)

[Dupree]

The form is great. I love it. The poem it's self is very impressive. I like how you wrote it and where you took it. Though, my friend, I regret to inform that you have a spelling error in the last line.

[Ashley Ree]

This is really neat. Not the whole "death" part, but the way it's written in general. It's impressive. I think however you forgot the word "Far" in the last sentence. Maybe Maybe Not. Nice Job.