Hand in the cookie jar

A poem

It all comes with time,
its all in your mind.
take that cookie from the cookie jar,
but just remember that in time
it was not worth the time for the crime.

Reviews

[Bayandur Pogosyan]

The last line was a bit confusing, "it was not worth the time for the crime". Maybe it would sound better if it was "a cookie was not worth the crime". Depends on what the author wanted to say.

Other than that, it wasn't pink-and-romantic, it wasn't over-ambitious, traits I respect. I will keep reading your poetry.

[john]

Thanks for the advice, that could be confusing I will always remember to proof read and edit and thanks for the criticism.

[Sky]

A brief spin on getting your hand caught in the cooking jar. I like how you used common phrases in this poem. For me it is a statement that fear is only in our minds, but to be careful what you choose because, good or bad, there are always consequences.

[john]

Thank you for commenting. Most of my poetry is short and not very esoteric and it works for me.

[Sky]

I meant common cliches rather than the actual language used. It works. It's good poem. :)

[john]

Ya I just thought it was something you could easily identify with a certain mood or idea.

Indonesian, would say.... " RAKUS "
Loved it, keep penning, life's frustrations
In captured humor, loved it.

E.L.