I don't want to hate you

Years ago I thought you were ready for me
that you would rescue you from my life of obscurity
I wouldn't have to want to be wanted anymore
truth evaporate from your words years ago
crumbled like the Marigolds I preserved when we met
I was broken, but still whole, young, free and you
found me in my drug induced, catatonic daydreams
and said you would be my tourniquet
but I'm bleeding now because of you...
The rhythm of our hearts was written in epic lengths
plans were made as we became one complete person
now we've separated and I can't help feeling illegitimate
because I feel like I mean nothing to you.

Reviews

[Mia Pow]

This brings back a few memories i wish could be forgotten...but i learned from them so they remain a part of me. Fantastic details! They quickly draw you in!

"plans were made as we became one complete person
now we've separated and I can't help feeling illegitimate
because I feel like I mean nothing to you."

[Angel Marie Antoinette]

I really like this poem. I can relate to it. I like the wealth of images (crumbled Marigolds, catatonic daydreams, tourniquet). I especially liked how it is a love poem but you didn't use the L-word once, but you conveyed your feelings well (I had a poetry teacher who would have rated it a good poem on that alone).

I was broken, but still whole, young, free and you
found me in my drug induced, catatonic daydreams

(favorite lines)

[Wulfstan Crumble]

I loved the description. You are right. I am told that i use it too much sometimes. But, i just tell Natsumi that i say it only when i truly mean it from my heart... i just mean it too much. lol. Your descriptions were good and quite original. I like that you used marigolds. Do they have a special significance? Im not up on flowers. OF course the word that is repeated could be love but it could also be sorry. In this is seems to be sorry but the picture says love. Is that an intentional thing or am i reading too much into it?