Magic

Magic

A Poem by JR

It was the cleverness of my mouth

that brought you near

and a magic trick that got me in

the light weight of my fingers

that pulled us closer

(arch and ache)

the heavy weight of my fingers

that coded our flesh in stipple

(arch and ache)

the light weight of my fingers

that pulled us apart again

(arch and ache)

apple eaten too soon

it was the serpent of my tongue

that called you to the gates within

the parted garden of you

but pacts, myths, and magic tricks

can only last so long

we’ve been separated by

my wicked mouth

© 2020 JR


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Interesting use of mythical symbology here, the difference being the serpent of Eden is actually offering a mea culpa. He takes full responsibility for the situation, claiming it was his evil tongue that lured the lady on. It appears his glibness caused things to move too quickly, Eve eating the forbidden fruit too soon. Experience, as is its wont, has taught him a lesson. I hope.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JR

4 Years Ago

I hope so too buddy, I hope so too. Life is just a stretch of learning.



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The tongue can either curse or bless the power with is eternal...we need to choose our words and actions wisely as choice is the thing we answer to ourselves for...it all lies within us...nobody to blame except self...🌹

Posted 4 Years Ago


Interesting use of mythical symbology here, the difference being the serpent of Eden is actually offering a mea culpa. He takes full responsibility for the situation, claiming it was his evil tongue that lured the lady on. It appears his glibness caused things to move too quickly, Eve eating the forbidden fruit too soon. Experience, as is its wont, has taught him a lesson. I hope.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JR

4 Years Ago

I hope so too buddy, I hope so too. Life is just a stretch of learning.
the parted garden of you

Great poetic line.
My mouth has always been my bane. Well written.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JR

4 Years Ago

My mouth gets me both into and out of trouble LOL. I think maybe it's that way for all writers.
AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Yeah 😜 We’re quite in sync then

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