Throw up, girl

Quick and right off the top o' my mind, this was inspired by Mikl.'s lil ditty 'Some Women' Just having fun

If you need to throw up

I'll hold your hair, girl

If you need to grow up

I'll give you air, girl

Tell me to blow up

You'll get this stare, girl

Come f**k my flow up

you'll meet despair, girl

There's no way to slow up

rewind this here, girl

Be eatin crow up

see how much I care, girl

I'll eat and mow up

your juicy lair, girl

I'll invade and corrupt

your inner bare girl

You explode and erupt

tongue reaches there, girl

just don't interrupt

ride me on this chair, girl

So let it roll up

don't shed a tear, girl

Cause this love is enough

to keep us here, girl 

Reviews

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

This was sweet, funny rhythmic and made me smile, what more could a poet give a reader? lol I especially like these lines,

You explode and erupt
tongue reaches there, girl
just don't interrupt
ride me on this chair, girl

but I would! smiling, thanking you for a great start to my week.

LLB

[Caddie O'brien]

This one made me smile... you have a way with words but it never seems forced. Spectacular job JO

[Bethany Woody]

Such an interesting way to say I'll always be there no matter what you need. I love how this goes from almost playful to seductively serious in the end. It flows well and has a bit of a beat to it. My head was kinda nodding along to it as I read. I like the repartition of the words up and girl, it helped to keep me focused on what I was reading.

[justjenn_2u]

I was able to create my own beat in my head as I read this. This feels naughty : ) while giving attention to calling her - yours.

[April Child]

It's good, very good! I mean holding your girl's hair while she throws up, that is love! This is a very fun piece and it flows just great, I just tripped up on one line... "So let's let it roll up" read it a couple of times and it flowed better but maybe it would work better with 'lets' removed...

I'll invade and corrupt
your inner bare girl

mmmm yes please :)

[Hedra Helix]

dope flo;) thats 2 for 2, lets see if 3 makes me a solid fan.

[Brandon Taylor-Black]

Excellant flow, and tongue in cheek humorousness. This was fantastic.
Not too descriptive, the definately sublimely erotic.
Bravo on a wonderful write.

[Michael W. Farrelly]

Absolutely brilliant. LMFAO. Like a Chilli Peppers song, bro. Excellent. Ah, man, I gonna start sticking riffs onto some of your work ;-)

[Angel Bird]

An amazing work. Needs more than one read to sink completely in. Thought provoking in its essence.
Love the rhythmic beat of it. Very well done.

[Amanda Crandall]

interesting, fun and quickly placed. two thumbs up