Scared(the you and me)

I'm scared of

You

of looking into

those eyes, melting

Me

looking into

and ever through

You

of falling in love

and falling through

Again

I'm scared of

You

that you never

really loved

Me

that I can never be

what it is that

You

want, need to

somehow be

Complete

think about

and dream of

Me

completed by

You

completely

I'm scared of

Me

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

Simple, brief, but relatable, for sure. I like the repetition and isolation of the words "you" and "me", it conveys isolation of the characters, to me anyway. I hope that's what you were trying to do. This is honest, and like I said, relatable, because there's always some sort of fear or anxiety when dealing with the ones we're fond of.

Have a nice day!

[Tai Chi Italy]

I love this poem, such a sweet reflection of the power of love. Yes my friends, it is in the eyes that we find our nemesis on the love stakes. We just dive in or fall in or trip head first and drown. As in my case!lol Great work. Back to my old Tai Account, couldn't lay down and let her Die, the b***h wouldn't let me!lol smiling at you, Tai

[O!]

You and me arent us.....and the thought of us is scary coz the thought of us broke You and me.....yet us has its own magnetism scaring you...scaring me....

what say u?

i like the way u think.

x,
O!

[justjenn_2u]

I really like how at first you are scared of her. And in the closure, you break it down, showing that the reason you are scared of her is because you are scared of you. Very abstract!!!! Enjoyed!

[Erin Phoenix]

i know nothing about love.

I like this...


:)

[Brandon Taylor-Black]

This is similar to some of the things I've written myself. Scared of so many things...but ultimately, being scared of yourself...
This is a spectacular write, with excallant word choice and layout.
To Love others, we must first Love ourselves...to trust others, we must trust ourselves....To be Loved, we must Love, for without Love, there is nothing but a void.
Bravo

[Kara Emily Krantz]

this is fantastic. the form is wonderful.

"I'm scared of

You

that you never

really loved

Me"

there's a vulnerability and a beauty to this piece... i love it.

:) LOVE IT

[April Child]

It's true, love is risk. Someone said that dating is hurting and being hurt and I guess that's about right, I mean it can't be a happy ending every time but if we don't risk then we don't grow. Your poem reminds me very much of this sentiment. The fear... go on look in those eyes and melt.
Nice poem.

[Michael W. Farrelly]

There is such a sense of despair in this one. And the rythm and flow is compulsive; almost staccato. Very impressed with this one, bro. Truly. And as Travis says, the isolation of You and Me in the poem gives such a sense of dista,ce between the two people. Well done.