Dancing with Trees

Relentless wind blows circular
The branches with long tendrils
Like twisted, crooked wire
Seem tentatively attached at best

With a serpentine spine
They bend and bow
Forgetting posture of root
Succumbing to fluidity

Even without rhythm
There is a tendency to sway
Grabbing hold of thin fingers
Let's wait for the wind

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

Great imagery here, I like how understated it is. Also there's a reflective personal voice mixed in with the more distanced descriptive tone, and it works well.

(Thanks for your review a year ago, I haven't been on here much lately. Apologies for the delay!)

[Robert Parlange]

I liked it. Taking tree-hugging to the next level. Good use of imagery. Vivid.

Keep writing.

[emmajoy]

' With a serpentine spine - They bend and bow .. ' your phrasing really does suggest dancing with trees and by trees. Although you use irregular meter, there's a meter swaying here and there and really is quite lovely.

Great last line.. suggesting more to come from the scene or perhaps, a further poem from you. Lovely!

[Tony]

Sounds Fun! Lets!
Your Poetry is better than ever.

[THERISA]

Very descriptive way, describing Autumn's presence around us. Great way to nail, what Autumn is in 12 lines. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

[Ed Hart]

This is a good poem, Jessica. I hope you'll return and post more like this...Ed

[James K. Blaylock]

Perfect piece for Fall. Loved it!

jkb

[James Paulin]

Interweaving natural elements in describing trees is perfect to give the poem beautiful complexity within simplicity. Well done!

[Theresa]

Amazing imagery. I really like this especially the part "
The branches with long tendrils
Like twisted, crooked wire"
It's a very creative comparison. Nicely done.